Too young for her ...

[nebul3use]

Hi everyone!

My first langage is not english, so sorry for my mistakes!
Here is my first story...Hope you'll like it !
I wrote the 2 first chapters but here is just the first (a "prologue" rather than a real chapter), because the second is to long for one post and I need to be moderated before ^^
I'll put the second very quickly after the moderation!

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[nebul3use]

[I wrote "bashful" instead of "modest", to explain one of the element of Maya's character, in the 1st chapter sorry.
For information, when you see brackets in the bubbles, this means, this is just what the person is thinking.]

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[cappyboy]

Pretty good start. Love the relationship between Prince and his sister. There's clearly love there and yet they aren't afraid to battle wills against one another. They repesent sibling relations at their best. And don't worry about the English. It does show at times that it's not your native tongue and some phrases might be a bit awkward. But nothing that can't be figured out easily enough. I look forward to seeing more and learning about this guitarist girl.

[nebul3use]

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[nebul3use]

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[Spretten]

Hi! Nice story, the plot reminds me a typical 80s movie, haha. I mean that in a really good way of course. :)

[nebul3use]

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