View Full Version : Who Killed Tiffany Hillson? (COMPLETED)
26th Mar 2009, 09:26 AM
She truly was living the dream. Tiffany Hillson that is, Until she was found dead. Tiffany Hillson had it all. The expensive car and mansion, eveyone knew the Hillson's. Tiffany Hillson was Miss Teen Universe twice! Not to mention head of the cheerleading squad, oh and dont forget her wonderful boyfriend Jason Mackverville, who is quaterback for the high school football team. She had it all and more.....One day your on top of your game. The next well....you know how that goes. Look what happened at Tiffany Hillson.
26th Mar 2009, 05:07 PM
I likey :D Detctives are awesome :D
26th Mar 2009, 06:30 PM
Oo great beginning cant wait to see more!
27th Mar 2009, 02:59 AM
Ahhhh intrigue! I love stories like this.
Get a Veronica Mars esque character in there to solve it and I'm in love <3
27th Mar 2009, 03:47 AM
Well, you write a great hook :-)
27th Mar 2009, 03:51 AM
Great start! Can't wait to read more :)
27th Mar 2009, 04:00 AM
this is an great little intro you wrote,
its grabbbed my interest :)
i will definitely be keeping an eye out on this one.
good luck <3
28th Mar 2009, 08:25 AM
Looking forward to it.
28th Mar 2009, 10:28 PM
She walked in shutting the door behind her. "Detective Pleasant, and no jokes because i've heard them all." Detective Pleasant strode over to the desk where Yasmine Connors was sitting.
Detective: So Yasmine Connors is it?
Detective: Sorry to hear about your friend. Were working really hard to get to the bottom of this. It must be really hard time for you.
Yasmine: It is but am pulling through. Thank you for your concern and if theres anything I can do for you. Please let me know.
Detective: I do have a question for you Miss.Connors. Can you tell me about Tiffany Hillson's boyfriend? Jason Mackerville...
Yasmine: umm okay...What do you want to know?
Detective: How was there relationship? In your eyes? In your opinion..
Yasmine: Well it seemed pefectly normal as any relationship. Tiffany had it all. Perfect car and mansion. Perfect boyfriend....the usual. Nothing out of the ordinary.Why?
Detective: Really? Just normal and perfect? Nothing else?
Yasmine: Well yes detective. Why?
Detective: Tiffany had it all huh? Must be nice....how bout you? It says here your father is a Lawyer. You must not live the hard life either? Probably not a life like Tiffany tho? is that right?
Yasmine: What are you implying detective? or you saying am a suspect?
(Detective Pleasant chuckles)
Detective: Darling everyone is a suspect....including you.
Yasmine: This is ridiculous...Tiffany was my best friend.
Detective: oh really? So do best friends usually have a secret realtionship with there bestfriends boyfriend?hmm? Tell me? Because I dont recall at all sleeping with my bestfriend's boyfriend...or is that how kids do it now?
Yasmine: I dont know what your talking about!
Detective: Oh I think you do know what am talking about. Jealousy...Secret relationship. But I must say your father being a lawyer really is the cherry on top. Makes perfect since for an albi.
(Yasmine sits up quickly)
Yasmine: I dont have to answer any of your questions!
Yasmine sits up quickly adjusting her dress and heads for the door. As she pulls open the door the Detective stops her dead in her tracks.
Detective: Oh and Miss. Connors.....If you havent figured out by now.......Am really good at my job. I'll be in touch....
29th Mar 2009, 12:26 AM
Loving it! can't wait for an update :D
29th Mar 2009, 10:03 PM
Loving it! can't wait for an update :D
Me too. Keep it up.
2nd Apr 2009, 01:43 AM
I Am Obsessed. Must Have More Who-killed-tiffany-hilson Now. Now! I Am Counting The Seconds. One... Two... Three...
2nd Apr 2009, 01:45 AM
Seriously though, great story. amazing how you can make to intruging with so few words. Bravo. I would take off my hat to you, but I don't have a smiley that does that. So, I'll just leave it on. :hat:
2nd Apr 2009, 06:48 AM
want more now!!! haha!
3rd Apr 2009, 03:22 PM
Very nice.. a few grammar problems, but so far.. GREAT.. loved the pictures..
24th Apr 2009, 09:31 PM
The door shut behind Miss.Conners leaving Detective Pleasant alone in the room. As Detective Pleasant gathered her things on the desk the door opened behind. Detective Pleasant turned only to face Lieutenant Downey.
Detective Pleasant: Lieutenant..
Lieutenant Downey: Agent Pleasant..What do you got?
Detective Pleasant: Well all we know is that there was a secret relationship between Miss.Conners and Jason Mackerville. However it could be nothing. I need to dig into the others before we start to point the finger.
Lieutenant Downey: Secret relationship. One girl dead. A million other suspects. A innocent girl was murdered...stabbed 13 times in the chest and lower liver area. Her right hand missing and her eyes plucked out. I want the sick bastard who did this. I want each student,teachers,friends,ex boyfriends,parents,maids,butler anything you can think of...I want them all investigated. Everyone is a suspect.
She stood there facing and gazing upon the reflection casted in the mirror. Tiffany was dead. She repeated it a thousands times in her head. The queen bee was gone and she was never coming back.
(The door opened and Jennifer walked in)
Jennifer: Hey the police are here to escort us to school you ready?
Sasha: Yea just gimme a second okay?
(Jennifer nodded and closed the door. Sasha staired into the mirror one more time)
I was horrified that my best friend was dead. I would never want this on anyone. Never but a small part of me was well happy.......
25th Apr 2009, 12:57 AM
I like it! Keep it up!
This is getting interesting.
25th Apr 2009, 03:19 AM
Ooh yay, an update!
Poor Tiffany..what a way to go.
25th Apr 2009, 04:51 AM
Hmm. Interesting, why is that girl happy. Great update.
25th Apr 2009, 08:16 PM
great update! Jennifer and Sasha look great!
29th Apr 2009, 02:35 AM
The school was covered by Police and News Channels. They entered the school cafeteria where Yasmine was sitting at the table waiting for them. Sasha quickly sat next to Yasmine well Jennifer took a seat across from them.
Sasha: Oh my god I cant believe this is happening...Like really..I dont even know how to feel.
Jennifer: Who would want to kill Tiffany? I mean-this all doesnt seem real...none of it.
(Yasmine pulled out her Mac foundation out of her Coach purse and began retouching her face)
Yasmine: Someone wanted to and they did...I was investigated this morning by a detective.
Sasha: Oh my god Yasmine! Like CSI? or something?
(Yasmine nodded in agreement)
Jennifer: Of course there going to be investigating everyone..what did they ask you?
Yasmine: Just where was I and all that other bullshit...I got here early for cheer practice when I got the news..her parents found her body this morning. I havent got any other details than that..How bout you guys?
(Jennifer and Sasha nodded)
Sasha: You guys think the killer is-someone from Woodsberry?
Yasmine: Killer? Sasha...I think thats a little far fetch to say dont you think? I mean for all we know it could of been a theif breaking into there house...The Hillson's are well known for being wealthy in this town and her family own SimCorp. Who doesnt know the Hillsons?
Jennifer: She's right we dont know anything....
Sasha: What if Jason...
(Jennifer ans Yasmine quickly eyed her)
Sasha: I mean....I heard Jason is a suspect.
Yasmine: Dont be foolish Sasha....Jason wouldnt do that. He wasnt even there.
Jennifer: How would you know that?
Yasmine: I mean... come on...we know Jason. He's the highschool quaterback...thats just out of his characteristics.
(Jennifer began to tear up)
Yasmine: Dont cry Jennifer...
Jennifer: I just cant believe our best friends dead...
Yasmine: Look I know its a hard...its hard for all of us. We just need to stay focus.
Sasha: What if there was a killer? You know like on the movies..
Yasmine: Sasha! Enough...there is no killer. Okay? This isnt some kind of movie...
(The blonde beauty hunk known as Blair came into the caferteria. Greeting Yasmine with a kiss.)
Blair: You girls okay? I heard what happened...am really sorry..
Yasmine: What did you hear? Exactly.
Blair: Jason's being held up downtown at the Woodsberry Police Department...being Investigated...Its crazy. I heard Jason had something to do with it...
Yasmine: Will you guys stop...Jason had nothing to do with it.
Blair: Why so defense?
Yasmine: Am just saying...we shouldn't be pointing the finger at our fellow classmate thats all....You played football with him..Didnt you?
Blair: Yea but-
Yasmine: Okay would Jason do something like that?
Blair: well no...but
Yasmine: but nothing....you of all people at this table should know that..
(Yasmine turned her head noticing the Detective this morning walking into the cafeteria headed towards there table)
Detective: I understand you were all close friends of Miss.Hillsons is that correct? am...Detective Pleasant...I'll be calling you all in and talking with you individually through out the day..Miss Conners when you get a second can we talk?
Yasmine: Am sorry but I cant speak to you without a parent or lawyer present...oh wait...my father is my lawyer...I guess will have to talk when daddys around..
(Yasmine shot her a evil grin)
(The detective grinned)
Detective: I'll be in touch. Sorry for your loss
Jennifer: What was that all about?
Yasmine: Ugh nothing...nothing at all..Everything is just too much..Lets all meet up later after third period.
They began to part from the table and Jennifer couldn't help but hear the word "Killer" echo over and over in her head. But most of all she could always tell when Yasmine was keeping a secret and today Yasmine Conners was keeping a secret............
29th Apr 2009, 03:02 AM
And the whore is sleeping witht he deads girl boyfriend! Oh shiz what a sl*t! xD
I love it keep it up :D
30th Apr 2009, 10:01 PM
Wow this is so mysterious, who killed tiffany lol. Great update.
1st May 2009, 02:58 AM
Oooo suspense i love it! Keep it up!
1st May 2009, 09:15 AM
I have a feeling she's covering for Tiffany's boyfriend, he knows something.
1st May 2009, 06:50 PM
Jennifer walked into the bathroom bumping into a freshmen girl.
Jennifer: Oh my god..am so sorry
Freshmen: Its fine....really...hey sorry to hear about....Tiffany
Jennifer nodded and just smiled.
(Jennifer quickly scanned the room to see if anybody else was in there with her. She went for a tissue and began to tear up. The door opened and in walked her boyfriend Taylor)
(Taylor quickly engaged her with a hug. Jennifer couldnt hold in. She began to cry on his shoulder. It's what she needed)
Taylor: I heard what happened...
Jennifer: Who hasnt? Police and the news channels all over Woodsberry..I cant believe it Taylor. I just can't. This all seems so unreal, like am in a nightmare.
Taylor: What did you hear?
Jennifer: just that her body was found this morning. They havent given any details of how she died.
Taylor: How are the girls holding up?
Jennifer: In shock..
Taylor: I think we all are.
Jennifer: Yasmine just seems-I-
(Taylor looked at her suspicous)
Taylor: Yasmine what?
Jennifer: Its nothing..nothing at all.
Taylor: Hey look at me...its me. Taylor. Your boyfriend. You can talk to me about anything. You know that.
Jennifer: Its just seems like she's not acting herself. Like she's hiding something.
Taylor: I heard Jason had something to do with it. Do you think its something to do with Tiffany or Jason?
Jennifer: I dont know...I just know shes hiding something.. Like she's holding back...
Taylor: Look how bout we meet up later tonight? Sound good?
Jennifer: Sounds good.
(Taylor gave her a small kiss and quickly snuck out. Jennifer began to clean her self up. Then she heard a noise. She spun around to see what it was. The stall door opened and Yasmine walked out. Jennifer stood there shocked)
Jennifer: Yasmine! I didnt know you were in here..
Yasmine: Funny....I knew you were
1st May 2009, 07:00 PM
Oooh! the drama! and this is why you need to check under the cabins and see if any one is in the bathroom xD
1st May 2009, 11:05 PM
Uh oh somebody got caught!! Ha!
2nd May 2009, 04:36 AM
2nd May 2009, 08:41 AM
Ewww busted! lol great update.
14th May 2009, 01:35 AM
Preist: Tiffany Hillson was taken long before her time. We mourn not her lost but ours and so this is the time for those of us left behind to share our burdon together....united...Amen.
(Jennifer contunied to stare at Mrs.Hillson. She herself couldnt help but noticed the strong resembalance between her and Tiffany. They looked exactly like twins)
(It had been a few days since the incident in the bathroom. Ever since Yasmine has acted like it never happened. However Yasmine kept her distance and everytime she texted our emailed her she never replied. It was useless to even call her. She always ended up at her voicemail. Jennifer looked over to see if Yasmine had noticed her at all.)
(After the funeral people began parting ways and Jennifer walked up to Yasmine)
Jennifer: Yasmine how long or we gonna keep this up?
Yasmine: Jennifer were at a funeral...have some respect? Sasha you coming?
(Sasha quickly parted ways with Yasmine. It was as if Yasmine had become the leader of the social scene)
Jennifer stood there when she heard a noise in the bushes..she could of sworn she heard her own name. Then she heard it again. Jennifer slowly strode over to the bushes when she was pulled in. She tried to scream but a hand covered her mouth. She saw that it was Jason and he was telling her to be quiet)
Jennifer: What the hell is your problem?
Jason: Shhhhh am not trying to hurt you....I need to talk to you.
Jennifer: Can't you talk to me like a normal human being? Why you trying to be all secretive?
Jason: Listen...I had to keep a low profile. The police or all over me. Plus am not really suppose to be here.
Jennifer: Why not? Did you have-
Jason: Did I what? What?! Have something to do with Tiffanys murder? Just say it...thats what everyone else thinks..No..I didnt have nothing to do with her murder.
Jennifer: Its all over the news...Why me?
Jason: Look...no one really knows the truth..truth is-
Jennifer: They didnt have enough evidence to prove that you werent there? hmm
Jason: No...you think I would kill anyone? Huh? God no..and no there wasnt enough evidence because there is none..truth is...I was sleeping with Yasmine.
Jennifer: WHAT? Did Tif know?
Jason: of course, she found out....thats why the police think that I had something to do with it....
Jennifer: oh my god....I cant believe this..So why me? Why not go talk to Yasmine?
Jason: She doesnt wanna talk to me...shes ignoring me..Look theres something I need to tell you. I-
(Jennifer! a voice called)
Jason: I kept something from the police...That night I was there at Tiffanys.
Jennifer: What were you doing there?
Jason: She found out about me and Yasmine...so I went there to talk to her...but someone else was there..look I know I can trust you...will meet up later tonight...in private....i'll be in touch.
14th May 2009, 02:42 AM
Lovely update and great twist :D keep it up :P
14th May 2009, 03:20 AM
Hmm someone else was there...Great update.
14th May 2009, 04:48 AM
Oh wow i love the twist! Is he gonna spill or is someone gonna get him first? Great update i cant wait for more!
14th May 2009, 11:57 AM
More mysteries! Me likey!
14th May 2009, 10:42 PM
So Who Killed Tiffany Hillson? I'll hope to have the next chapter up Tmrw! :]
17th May 2009, 04:38 AM
I'm loving all the mystery!
18th May 2009, 03:08 AM
I kept thinking what Jason said at the funeral. That he knew something, we were suppose to meet but he never showed I waited 2 hours at the hilltop near the outskirts of the town. I didnt tell anyone. I called and texted he never replied. It was dangerous of me to do so but I needed to find out more and latley it seemed I was the only one who really cared.
I sat there in biology hearing Mrs.Frankins talk her ear off when the principal came in. It was bad enough I wasnt fully all there paying attention since my mind was on Jason's secret. Not to mention that the school board had automatically made the school become a uniform dress code. Since Tiffanys death the city council has been desperatley trying to promote a safe and classy town reputation among the news and people global. Woodsberry was known as the little rich high class town. The last thing on there agenda they needed was to be known as a town with a "KILLER" reputation.
A young girl followed in by her.
Mrs.Frankins: Class I want to welcome Woodsberry High's newest transfer students, Miss.Kelly Herring.
Mrs.Frankins: Maybe one of you would like to show her around after class? hmm? anyone? How about you Jennifer? You feel up to it?
(Jennifer stumbled for a second. How could she be picking her of all people. Why not Bobby Jenson or Mike Vance? She just lost her bestfriend for godsakes)
Jennifer: Umm Yea of course Mrs.Frankins of course.
Jennifer: So how do you like it so far?
Kelly: Its great! Lots of news cameras here about that girl..Did you know her?
Jennifer: Ummm she was my bestfriend.
Kelly: Oh my god...am so so so sorry. I-I didnt know.
Jennifer: Its fine...where did you transfer from again?
Kelly: Sunny Side Hills ... Familar?
Jennifer: Yea thats past FootHills right? Towards the ocean....my dad goes out there alot...or use to I mean...
(As they turned the corner they bumped into some familiar faces)
Yasmine: Watch were you going...
Jennifer: Whats your problem?
Yasmine: My problem? I dont have one...oh wait on second thought...your my problem....backstabber
(Kelly stepped in)
Kelly: Hi am Kelly! I just transfered to this school..
Yasmine: Sasha was I talking to her?
Sasha: Nope... (She said coldly)
Yasmine: Thought so....
(Yasmine and Sasha moved past them walking down the hall like the divas they were)
Jennifer: Hey Yasmine!
(The students became quiet)
Jennifer: At least I dont sleep around with my dead best friends boyfriend!
(The crowd in the hall could be heard gasping and dead silence was all that whimpered through the hall)
(Yasmine turned around slowly and walked back up to Jennifer and leaned in forward)
Yasmine: Keep it up bitch....you'll wind up dead...just like Tiffany.
Jennifer stood there stunned....did she just say what she thought she said? How could she? Yasmine Conners would never say such a thing.....but she did............
18th May 2009, 06:14 AM
Poor Kelly, what bad timing! It's bad enough being the new girl, but at a school like that? Jeez.
18th May 2009, 06:20 AM
God they remind me of Drama between Diana and Britney in my story xD great update! xD
21st May 2009, 02:17 AM
Haha poor Kelly! Great update! Hmmm i wonder what happened to Jason?
21st May 2009, 12:29 PM
Wow drama drama drama just like the high school i went to lol. Great update.
25th Jun 2009, 09:33 PM
2nd Jul 2009, 05:46 PM
Jennifer and Kelly stood there while Yasmine and Sasha made there way out of the hall.
Kelly: Okay....Repunzel has some MAJOR issues.
(Jennifer couldnt help but laugh)
Jennifer: C'mon lets gets some air.
Kelly: Jennifer you totally have to let me know the inside scoop on the two skanks from HELL!
Jennifer: I told you we all use to be bff's and now were enemies....stupid huh? and there not skanks....
Kelly: Enemies? Yes....and as for skanks your right....there not just skanks...there high class skanks.
Jennifer: Your funny you know that?
Kelly: Your not too bad yourself. Look I know you just lost your friend so dont worry am not gonna ask you about what just happened its none of my business...unless you want it to be?
(Kelly let out a small giggle)
(Then 3rd period bell rang)
Jennifer: Looks like were late...catch up later?
Kelly: of course silly
(Jennifer smiled and departed from Kelly as they went there seperate ways)
Jennifer sat in her desk trying to make expressions as if she were truly paying attention to Mr.Ward. The truth of the matter is that she wasnt. Her mind was spinning with a million questions. Tiffany murdered...Jason's still hadnt got back to her about this "secret" and not to mention her bestfriend's have turned against her and as if anything else couldnt get much worse what if there was a killer here in Woodsberry Hills. The thought of it made her cringe. Jennifer had been waiting back to hear from Jason but nothing. She called and no one answered...she texted and no reply. Then a buzz began to go off in her bag. She skimmed the room to see if anybody was watching her. The coast was clear as she peeked into her bag. Her cell was lit up on the screen with the words, "NEW TEXT MESSAGE". She looked around the room once more then with anticipation she flipped open the phone. Jennifer wondered who it could be from. The text message says its from Jason. She couldnt believe it. Now he was just getting back to her? She opened the new message. It read,
"MEET ME IN THE GIRLS BATHROOM IN THE EAST END OF THE CAMPUS"
(Jennifer stood up and walked to the front of the class)
Mr.Ward: Jennifer is there something wrong?
Jennifer: No Mr.Ward...but may I use the restroom pass?
Mr.Ward: Of course.
Jennifer skimmed down the halls not trying to run. She already knew why he would want to meet on the East End side of the school. That part of the school was deserted. She couldnt help but wonder why he was hiding and as well as what he was hiding. She arrived to the bathroom and slowed down. She hesitated to open the door and then she pushed through.
She couldn't believe it.....there stood Jason's body hung from the ceiling with a knife on the floor and blood all over his body. All that could be heard were screams.....horrifying screams.......
2nd Jul 2009, 08:15 PM
Yay! An update! Oooo i'm loving this mystery! I cant wait for more!
2nd Jul 2009, 11:43 PM
Wow thats intense that poor girl.
3rd Jul 2009, 05:48 AM
Oh SNAP. What an ending.
3rd Jul 2009, 06:07 PM
I will not repeat what Dani said xD because I feel same way
4th Jul 2009, 03:38 PM
hey guys srry its been awhile! But am back! Am glad to hear you guys like it!
19th Jul 2009, 06:06 AM
Jennifer: THERE WAS SOMEONE ELSE OUT THERE! I'VE ALREADY TOLD YOU ALL THE INFORMATION YOU NEEDED TO KNOW! WHY DON'T YOU UNDERSTAND DETECTIVE? WHY DON'T YOU BELIEVE ME!?
Detective Pleasant: I understand its hard Jennifer...first Tiffany now your other classmate....but as far as it looks, this is what the case seems to be turning out to look like.
Jennifer: No...No..Jason wouldn't do that...he wouldnt.
Detective Pleasant: Killers act on fear, Lies, and Deception. You have to leave this to the professionals.
Jennifer: Jason's not a killer. HE'S NOT!
Detective Pleasant: how do you know that? huh?
Detective Pleasant: My point exactly..Thank you for your time.
Jennifer: Thats it? huh?
Detective Pleasant: He killed himself of the guilt and pressure of killing Tiffany...Might I remind you Jennifer, she was stabbed 13 times, her right hand missing and not to mention her eyes plucked out..If that doesnt sound like a killer to you Ms.Gavins you've got problems. The knife had his hand prints all over it. The same knife that was used of the murder of Tiffany Hillson....the prints of the knife match exactly. He hung himself and stabbed himself....a sick lunatic killer...guilt Ms.Gavins....guilt. How can one live with themselves after commiting such a crime like this one.
Jennifer: No....I refuse to believe it. He wouldnt do such a thing...you didnt know him like we did..
Detective Pleasant: OH is that right Ms.Gavins? I didnt know your friends like you did? Would this happen to be the same friend that had an affair with your other best friend? Your best friend you know so well that you didnt even know an affair was taking place? The same friends that hid secrets and lies from you. Would that be the same friends? Let me give you some advice kiddo.....I said it once and i'll say it again..Leave this to the professionals. I didnt graduate at the top of my academy for nothing. Am good at my job its what I do best. An officer can escort you out until your ride arrives, Now GOODNIGHT.
(Jennifer stood up to meet Detective Pleasant face to face. She eyed her and made her way to the door. Jennifer grabbed the door handle and pulled open but before she made her way out she eyed back at the Detective and called out for her)
Jennifer: I already knew you good at your job....I just didn't know you were such a bitch.
Jennifer rumbled through her mind of everything that had taken place. Was there really a killer in Woodsberry and if it were true what and who were behind these attacks and why? A shiver ran up her spine and made her cringe.
(Then Taylor pulled up and ran out of his truck with open arms)
(Jennifer began to cry and mutter)
Taylor: Am here baby...am here
She washed her body away from the tears and pain. But most of all she tried to wash away the fear that lurked beneath her. The same fear that made her unable to sleep at night.
(Then the power went off)
She tried not to let fear run through her mind but as much as she tried to block it she couldnt.
(Suddenly the power switched back on.)
Yasmine! A all to familar voice called out.
Yasmine Honey it was just the power. Her mom called from the other side of the door. Yasmine got dressed and as soon as she was opening her bathroom door the phone began to go off.
Yasmine picked up. Only to hear Sasha on the other end.
Sasha: How you holding up?
Yasmine: Am okay...everything is just all a little too much...ya know?
Sasha: Its so weird. The town is having a 24 hour patrol system in all the area for extra precaution..and not to mention an earlier curfew 9'Oclock.
Then she heard something outside her window. Yasmine didnt respond..leaving a silence on the phone line between her and Sasha.
Sasha: Yasmine! Hello...Yasmine! Are you there???
Yasmine: Yea hold up a sec...
Yasmine crept forward to peek through the window. She looked through not seeing anything. She quickly pulled her curtains down.
Yasmine: Sorry...I thought I heard a weird noise..
Sasha: Is everything okay?
Yasmine: Yea...I'ma call it a night Sasha...Talk to you tommorow..nite.
Yasmine remembered her bathroom window she had left open and quickly ran to shut it. She locked it and peeked through the window. All she could see and hear were the trees and crickets. She quickly pulled the curtains down. It was bad enough her family lived out in woods were there private estate was located at.
She entered her room to find a vase on her small white table. A vase that was not there a moment ago. She had never owned a vase like this before nor has she ever seen one particulary like this.
She walked over to it slowly. Her eyes focused only on the vase. She uncovered the antique vase. She gasped, inside the vase was a hand. A hand that belong to a girl she once knew. A hand that had been missing at a crime scene. A hand that belong to another. Inside it was a small red piece of paper and in black sharpie writing wrote SURPRISE...
Yasmine quickly turned around with fear..The window that she had shut was open with a draft breezing through....someone was there. Someone had been in there with her...someone was watching... She screamed and headed towards the door. All she could think about was the killer...the killer who had been watching her................
19th Jul 2009, 07:33 AM
That shit is creepy.
Keep it up!
19th Jul 2009, 04:38 PM
Ooo i like it! Loved the shower scene lol and i agree, very creepy shit going on!
20th Jul 2009, 08:26 PM
Wow that really is creepy lol. I love the suspense. Great update.
20th Jul 2009, 09:23 PM
Seriously creepy! Awesome story! =)
23rd Jul 2009, 02:14 PM
Arg! I need to read the rest!
30th Jul 2009, 01:35 AM
I though Yasmine was the killer..All I know..Jason didnt kill himself,or the other girl.It was someone else.Sasha?
12th Aug 2009, 05:06 AM
I'm really looking forward to an update! Hurry up cousin!
20th Aug 2009, 12:52 AM
Jennifer walked into the house. Her mother Sue, who just looked as she herself came home, spun around leaping towards her and embracing her daughter tightly.
Sue (Jennifers mom) - Oh honey! I was so worried about you! Am so so sorry, I was out of town and as soon as the school got a hold of me I rushed home. Oh thank god your okay!
Sue began to tear up while she hugged Jennifer in her arms. Jennifer closed her eyes resting her head apon her mothers shoulder. The smell of her mothers fragrance made her feel comfortable and at home. The smell of Chanel Number 5. lingered and Jennifer felt at ease. She blocked the images of Jason. She tried to push it as far back as her mind would let her but no matter how hard she tried the scary images just popped right back up. The blood, the knife, him hanging there. It was all just one big nightmare but the truth of the matter is. It wasn't a nightmare it was all reality.
The tv in the backround began to sound familar to Jennifer's ears. Her mother and her both turned towards the televsion set. It seemed her mother Sue, had notice as well. Jennifer rushed towards the coffee table and increased the volume.
"THIS IS CHANNEL 6 BREAKING NEWS WITH ANA LONG"
ANA LONG - This is Ana Long here at the downtown Woodsberry Police Department. It seems to appear a crime scene has tooken place down at the Connors Estate mansion.Which is currently blocked off from the media but Both Mrs.Conners and Yasmine conners, senior student to Woodsberry High and best friend to Tiffany Hilson, have been transfered to the Police Department where media has builded up. It seems to appear that a hand had appeared in Ms.Yasmines room. The hand that belonged to Tiffany Hillson, that was actually missing in the crime scene. The hand did have Tiffany's class ring on it and is being scanned and investigated as we speak. The head of police did not want any recordings or interviews just quite yet however the FBI are being more active in this small town which is causing quite of stir. Two deaths both Senior High School Students, Tiffany Hillson 18 and Jason Mackorville 18. Jason was orignially suspected of the murder of Ms.Hillson however things are seeming to turn the tables with current events. No statment has been released from the Connors Lawyers but will keep you updated. The Woodsberry Police Department did say security will be beefed up to 24 hours through the town. A earlier curfew for underage will be set at 8 and the police department would like any one who is planning to leave anywhere to travel in twos or groups and the FBI have set up permiters on the exit's to the town. Will keep you updated. This was Ana Lang with BREAKING NEWS...
Sue slowly walked over to Jennifer and grabbed the remote and turned of the TV. Jennifer staired at the TV before her mother broke the silence.
Sue - Am so sorry honey..I wish you hadn't seen that..Your father and I, have decided that the best intrest for you is to leave town. Maybe even out of state, Like your fathers side of the family. It would be healthier not to be around all this.
Jennifer looked at her mom and began to tear up. She leaped into her mothers arms again crying.
Jennifer - I just want all this to stop..all of it. Am scared...
Sue - I know honey...I know thats why its best if you leave. To be safe. What ever all this mess is...I dont want you any part of it....at all. Look, I want you to take a hot shower and gather your things...when your father arrives will leave first thing in the morning.
Jennifer - Where is dad?
Sue - He was down at the old beach house..But thats not important right now..okay sweetie? go upstairs.
Jennifer wiped her tears and made her way to her room. She closed the door behind her. She flickered the lights on and made her way into her bathroom turning on the hot water. She put her hand underneath...the warm sensation hit her hand and it felt so good and relaxing. It made her skin tingle from the joy. Then she heard her mom knocking on the door.
Jennifer - Yes?
Sue - Just checking on you...thats all. I left my purse in the car am gonna run outside for a quick second its only across the street okay?
Jennifer - Let me come with you..
Sue - honey its right outside...ill be back in a flash. okay? I love you
Jennifer - I love you to mom.
Jennifer closed the door and headed towards the bathroom. She began to take her things off when the phone began to ring. Maybe it was Yasmine she wondered. She quickly made her way to the phone.
Jennifer - Hello?
She waited but nothing. Then she heard a muffling on the other line. Her body became tense.
Jennifer - Hello! (she screamed)
The muffled began to continue and she didnt quite know what it was until it was clear that it was a voice breathing on the other line. Then she remembered she was such in a rush to pick up the phone she didn't look at the caller ID. She looked down while the phone was clenched to her hands. It read : JASON MACKORVILLE. The same number as his missing cell phone. She became even more tense. Then the ruffled voice spoke.
"GO TO THE WINDOW" (the raspy voice spoke)
Jennifer spun arround looking through the window.
Jennifer - NOOOOOO! (she screamed)
Jennifer screamed as she watched her mother get ran over. She dropped the phone and ran outside to her mother's aide. She screamed and cried. Her mother layed on the road...DEAD.
20th Aug 2009, 02:44 AM
Jennifer's not going anywhere! I like how you set up her to be hit by the car! Looks very cool, i need MOAR!!!
20th Aug 2009, 02:00 PM
That is creepy.
22nd Aug 2009, 04:59 PM
hey guys give me feedback on what you think! I wana hear wat u have to say!
25th Aug 2009, 07:19 PM
Awww thats so sad. Poor poor Jennifer.
17th Sep 2009, 05:59 AM
:deal: get to work buddy!
11th Nov 2009, 07:18 AM
He sat there silent in handcuffs not saying word. Dr. Jean stepped out of the cell.
Dr. Jean: His name is Willard Rossling and the reason why you can't get a word out of him is because he suffers from a psychotic mental disorder known as "Psychosis". In terms for your understanding he has a abnormal condition to the mind. In addition to his non-cooperation with the Woodsberry Police he can't speak either. His Larynx are crushed and have been since before his enrollment at BlackGate. He escaped recently about two months ago until now....
Lieutenant Downey: The evidence we currently have points to him...but why? Why would a man who has nothing to do with this town or the victims do this? Them imparticular....the SUV he was found in was from the Connors. The same Connor's where the missing hand of Tiffany Hillson appeared and as well as Jason Mackorville's phone was also located on the suspect. All this fits perfect into the puzzle. It just doesnt seem right.
Dr. Jean: Why should it? With all do respect Lieutenant Downey, a man who is known for making and creating random acts for no intent purposes...why should he have an albi? Why should there be a cause? This man doesnt need a purpose....he himself is a cause.
MEANWHILE BACK AT JENNIFERS
Detective Pleasant: I understand this is a very hard time for you and your father but I just got off the phone with Lieutenant Downey. The driver behind the attack of your mother and friends has been caught and is down at the police station as we speak.
Jennifer: I-I-Who is it?
Detective Pleasant: An escaped mental patient from BlackGate named Willard Rossling.
Jennifer: How do they know it's him?
Detective Pleasant: Jason's Phone was found and other evidence as well. Not to mention the SUV is the same vecihile from Mr.Connors.
Jennifer's Father: Well what's the feedback from the observations they've got from him?
Detective Pleasant: Well they haven't been able to get any details from his perspective...
Jennifer: Why not!? He hasnt said anything?
Detective Pleasant: Well his Larynx are crushed he can't speak even if he wanted too. Now I promise you, as soon as we are updated with anything new I can assure you, will let you know.
Jennifer: Wait...Wait...this doesn't make sense...he cant speak?At all? That doesnt make sense...
Detective Pleasant: And why is that??
Jennifer: Because I recieved a phone call from Jason's phone Detective....either you got the wrong person or there is someone else out there....waiting.
Jennifer's Father: Waiting for what?
A/N: AM BACK!!! Sorry its been so long since I've updated! I do apologize and I hope you guys like it! Let me know what you think! I plan to update again this week! So Who Killed Tiffany Hillson? :D
11th Nov 2009, 05:31 PM
Loved your update! i really like how you brought in a scapegoat! Willard Rossling has been set up. wants MOAR!
11th Nov 2009, 07:24 PM
Oo, I've only just found this, but it's so good! I can't wait to read more, I love how you leave each chapter on a cliffhanger! AND I wonder just who did kill Tiffany Hillson?! Maybe Jennifer's dad...where has he been hiding throughout all of this, hmm? :lol:
15th Nov 2009, 01:54 AM
Jennifer suddenly heard a disturbance outside her front door.
Police Officer: Look nobody and I mean nobody goes in pal. Havent seen you seen the news? Now unless you want to be arrested.
Jennifer's father, Mr. Willington opened the door and Jennifer herself stood up to see what the comotion was all about.
A young man was trying to force his way into the house and that's when Jennifer suddenly snapped back into reality and realized who it was. Her father spoke out once they all realized who it was, Taylor.
Mr.Willington: It's all right officer, he's part of our family. C'mon in Taylor.
Taylor rushed past the officer and made his way towards Jennifer and embraced her into his arms.
Taylor: Am so sorry baby....am so sorry I wasn't here for you.
Taylor looked her in the eyes.
Taylor: Look at me....I promise am never gonna leave yourside...ever. You understand?
Jennifer nodded her head. Jennifer noticed someone else walking in the front door and to her surprise she was quite shocked.
Jennifer: Kelly?! OMG!
Kelly smiled and ran forward to hug Jennifer.
Kelly: I heard....and caught up with Taylor once the news broke out. I might barley know you but friends are there for friends in a time of need.
Jennifer started to tear up and Taylor came to her side resting his arm on her waist.
Kelly: Is it true? They caught him?
Jennifer looked back at Taylor and then back at Kelly.
Jennifer: Lets talk in the kitchen..
The three gathered into the kitchen for privacy.
Taylor: Whats going on?? It's all over the news that they caught the killer.
Jennifer: Not exactly..
Kelly: What do you mean?
Jennifer: I received a call from someone on Jason's Mackorville's cell. The same Jason who was found murdered at our school. Just before my mother was-
It was hard for her to spit out the words.
Jennifer: Killed...they spoke out to me. Well whoever it is they have downtown...they say he can't speak. That his layrnx are crushed. So If whoever they have downtown can't speak, then who was it that called from Jason's cell? See....something isn't adding up.
Taylor: So your saying there's someone else?
Jennifer: maybe...or they might just have the wrong person..Look, whoever it is they Killed Tiffany and Jason, then my mom. I don't know if I can just stand around and wait to be next or worse, have my father be next..
Kelly: It's too dangerous to go wondering...if there is someone else. Its not safe to go out and about.
Jennifer: I think we need to gather and talk to Yasmine and Sasha. The murders are too highly connected. I tried calling them but there not picking up...I don't no where they could be..
Kelly: I do...there's a big party tonight in celebration of the killer being caught. Everyone's been talking about it..
They all heard the front door open in a panic while the Officer called out for Detective Pleasant. The three made there way into the livingroom to see what was going on.
Police Officer: Detective Pleasant there's been a problem down at the Hillson Estate.
Detective Pleasant: What is it??
Police Officer: Its Mr.Hillson, Tiffanys father....they found him in his office. A gun in his hand. He's commited suicide....
Jennifer looked at Taylor and then back at Kelly.
Taylor: Your right....we cant just stand around. The body count is adding up...Let's go.
15th Nov 2009, 06:27 PM
Hmm, why do i have a suspicion about Kelly?
15th Nov 2009, 06:39 PM
Hmm, why do i have a suspicion about Kelly?
Oo good, I had that feeling too, but then I thought I was just trying to make everyone the killer inside my head. But it IS suspicious how she turns up just as the murders are starting... :wtf:
15th Nov 2009, 11:59 PM
yes, i do think its funny hmm....
18th Nov 2009, 02:26 AM
SASHA'S HOUSE / BEFORE THE PARTY
Sasha: Yea, I Know. Look I gotta go. I gotta get ready for tonight...okay see tonight! kiss kiss bitch! muah!
Sasha hangs up the phone. Then the phone rings.
She waits a minute or two before she decides to hang up. She brushes it off like nothing.
The Phone rings again
Sasha turns and looks at the phone. It continues to ring. She couldn't help but get the chills. Oh who was she kidding the killer had been caught. After all the big party in celebration of the capture of the killer was tonight. She goes and picks it up once more.
Sasha: LOOK WHO EVER THE HELL YOU -
Then she hears something on the other end of the line. Almost a shuffle noise.
Sasha: Hello??? Who is this?
Then the shuffling noise gets louder and louder. Then nothing.....She couldn't help but try and hear what the noise was.
Sasha: Keep it up and am gonna call the police!
Then something speaks. A cold deep voice.
Voice: Do you wanna die tonight?
Sasha looses her breath for a quick second.
Sasha: Look I don't know what kind of sick game your playing at...
Before she can finish the voice cuts her off.
Voice: After I kill him, am gonna kill you......
The phone line ends.
Connie Meyers and Jill Brewler were in the corner gossiping about the recent events that had tooken place. No one expected to see Yasmine Connors that night. Until Yasmine Connors and Sasha Smith came through the doors like two divas walking the red carpet.
Jill : Ugh look what Woodsberry finest dragged in....the lastest trian wreck.
Jill and Connie began to laugh. Yasmine and Sasha caught there eyes. Yasmine already knew that the entire school knew about the affair and that her beloved sweetheart Blair had broke up with her. Now the news was spreading like US weekly.
Yasmine looked at Sasha.
Yasmine: I need a drink. You?
Sasha: Actually am fine....I'll be back in a sec.
Sasha departed from Yasmine. Yasmine noticed Sasha had her eye on her lastest boy toy. DJ Josh was mixing tonight. He was an underground DJ and all the girls were crushing on him. Besides all the craziness he was Woodsberry's latest celeb.
Yasmine headed towards the bar. She needed to clear her mind. She noticed her ex Blair passing Connie. Connie pulled Blair towards her and began flirting with him. Yasmine couldn't believe her. Connie Meyers was not gonna get away with this. Yasmine headed over to the three where Jill, Connie, and Blair were talking.
Yasmine: Blair? Can I speak with you?
Blair: I got nothing to say to you.
Blair turned around and stormed off. Yasmine became more frustrated and turned toward Connie. Connie was grinning.
Yasmine: What do you think your doing???
Connie: Excuse me??
Yasmine: Bitch, don't act like I don't know what your up too. I can see through you clear as glass. Am gonna tell you once and once only....Stay away from my boyfriend....
Connie: Boyfriend? Honey your gonna have to be a little more specific on which boyfriend your talking about because the last time I checked the news, you had more than one.
Yasmine stormed off after Blair across the room dance floor to trail after him. Meanwhile Sasha was off across the other end talking to DJ Josh.
Sasha: Hey you!
Dj Josh: Whats up sexy? I see you made it!
Sasha: Your funny....
Dj Josh began to put his music system in auto mode and let the techno music play on the dance floor. He stepped off the platform and leaned in towards Sasha.
Dj Josh: Do you wana go somewhere more private?
Sasha: You know I do...
Sasha and Dj Josh trailed off until they were no longer visible in the sight of others. Sasha couldn't believe she was hooking up with Dj Josh tonight but she also couldn't and didn't want to believe that phone call.....the words echoed in her head over and over.
"After I kill him, am gonna kill you"
18th Nov 2009, 03:28 AM
Yasmine stormed off after Blair through the crowd trailing him and Connie eyed her as she went.
Yasmine finally caught up to him and stopped him in his tracks.
Yasmine: BLAIR PLEASE!
Blair: WHAT? WHAT MORE DO YOU WANT?
Yasmine: Please! I just wana talk....I just want you back.
Blair: Oh yea? While you should of thought about that before you fucked jason.
Blair pushed passed her as she tried to cling to him. Blair stormed off again across the room. Yasmine grabbed a drink. She began to gulp it down rather than sip on it.
Blair was sitting down when Jennifer popped out from nowhere. Blair looked up surprised.
Jennifer: Blair! Where's Sasha and Yasmine?
Blair: Like am suppose to know???
Jennifer: Blair this is serious...we need to gather everyone..
Blair: Yasmine was over there across the bar but I don't know where she went off too. Whats going on?
Jennifer: Look I don't think the killer is really caught..
Blair: What??? What do you mean the killer isnt really caught?
Jennifer: Look I'll explain everything we just need to regroup..Let's split up into two. Me and Taylor will go together and you and Kelly will go and search together. Make sure your cell phone is on that way we can keep in touch once we find them.
Yasmine walked into the room.
A bottle was sitting on a small table as she entered the room.
Yasmine: Now this is where the good stuff was hiding.
Yasmine began to poor herself a glass. It was the only way she could get her mind of everything.
Yasmine: Here's a toast to nothing!
She raised her glass in mid air and drank the entire glass in one gulp.
She began to feel dizzy and sat down on the floor.
Then out of nowhere......everything went black.
A/N: Hey guys I kept my promise!!!! Who Killed Tiffany Hillson and Who's gonna be Next? You'll just have to keep reading to find out :report:
18th Nov 2009, 03:33 AM
Look at DJ Josh! Too bad....
I love your updates! I feel like a finale is coming up and I'm super excited!
18th Nov 2009, 09:50 PM
I have to say, if Yasmine and/or Sasha ARE next, it's really their own faults...going off with random boys, drinking any old drink they find...tut tut.
I can't wait for the next update!
19th Nov 2009, 06:33 AM
Dj Josh: Your so beautiful...you know that?
Sasha: I-I-don't know what to say..
Sasha smiled and looked deep into his eyes as he smiled back at her.
Dj Josh: You don't need to say anything.....your eyes say it all.
Sasha smiled twice as big this time.
Dj Josh: Which reminds me....I left the bottle in your car. I'll be back. I promise.
Dj Josh stepped out of the hottub and winked back at her. He quickly took off outside.
Sasha closed her eyes and let her body soak in the hot water.
She closed her eyes and listened to the noises around her. As she listened to the noises and soaked in the sizzling water. The words echoed in her mind again.
"After I kill him, am gonna kill you."
Sasha opened her eyes and she couldn't help but get the feeling someone was watching her. Thats when she noticed Dj Josh had been gone for longer than a few seconds. What was taking him so long? She wondered.
She stepped out of the hottub holding herself to keep herself warm. She called out his name as loud as she could and nothing. No reply.
She stepped outside to look for him and she continued to call out his name. He wasn't there. She looked quickly in the car but nothing. She continued to worry and decided to step back inside to put her clothes on.
As she stepped back inside. She noticed a gift on the floor wrapped perfectly with a little note with her name on it. So thats what Dj Josh was up to.
Sasha: OKAY JOSH! You can come out now!
She looked around the room for him to pop out, but he didn't. She stepped over to the gift and opened the little letter attached to it. It read,
DEAR SASHA, AFTER I KILL HIM, AM GONNA KILL YOU.....
She dropped the letter on the floor. Her hands started to tremble as she reached to unwrap the gift. She began to unfold the boxed gift and as she opened it she let out a loud scream. She stood up and covered her hands over her mouth.
In the box was her fathers head. She screamed and ran out the door towards the car. Her mind began to spin in circles. She scanned the woods for Dj Josh. Then someone came from behind her and grabbed her hand. She spun around to face an unknown man who was covered in blood. She screamed louder than ever.
Unknown Man: WAIT! WAIT!
It had to be the killer she thought to herself. She didn't give him a chance to speak. She kicked him in between the legs and he made her way to her car.
She got in the car and noticed Josh's head layed there perfectly on the passenger seat. She cried and started the car and took off.
The unknown man was screaming something over and over as she saw him in the rear view mirror as she drove away. Soon she was out of the distance to be seen.
The unknown man screamed for her to come back. He fell to the ground. If Sasha had took time to examine the unknown man she would of noticed the blood was neither Josh's or her father's. It was his own. His blood gushed out from his own scars.
If only Sasha had payed more attention to what he was saying as she was driving away. He was screaming to help her. He was screaming to save her.....
The unknown man was screaming that someone was in the back of the car......the killer was gonna keep their promise....and sasha was next...................
A/N: HOPE YOU GUYS LIKE! ;)
19th Nov 2009, 06:40 AM
Oh poor Sasha! Too quick to panic!
DJ Josh, poor unsuspecting DJ Josh...
19th Nov 2009, 12:09 PM
That was the creepiest chapter yet! And doesn't Sasha know her urban legends? Always check your back seat!
19th Nov 2009, 01:38 PM
Man oh man, I don't know how I got roped into reading this stuff. Maybe it's the fact that the most gruesome stuff is left to the imagination and only the aftermath is depicted. But you've got me going here and hoping they catch this guy quick.
But, Phoebe's right. Sasha is not me. She should know her urban legends better than I do or would care to. Heck, anyone's who has ever read a suspense novel should know about checking the back seat. Much less a horror story like this one.
19th Nov 2009, 03:21 PM
This is exciting! Am I the only one who thinks its Taylor, he does drive a pick-up truck so he can haul around bodies lol. Awww Sasha was so pretty :(
21st Nov 2009, 08:17 AM
They walked into the room hoping to find Sasha or Yasmine but once more they were disapointed. The mansion was much bigger than they expected. Every corner and every turn was a dead end. They had been searching for over a half an hour and couldn't get ahold of either Kelly or Blair. Taylor closed the door behind him as he entered.
Jennifer turned to face him. Taylor took a deep breath and seem to look up like he was thinking.
Jennifer: What's wrong Taylor?
Taylor: I just can't help imagine what your going through....what were all going through.
Jennifer: Please Taylor.....I can't..I-I-can't discuss this...not now..It's too hard for me.
Jennifer began to choke up and Taylor pulled her close to hold her.
Jennifer let it out. All the pain she was holding in finally made it's way to the surface.
Jennifer: Am scared! (she cried out)
Jennifer: She's gone! she's gone Taylor...and-and-she's not coming back! I just want to wake up from this nightmare....all of it...
Taylor: I know...I love you Jen.....I promise where gonna get this guy....
Then that's when they heard the scream. A scream that only Jennifer herself knew. Yasmine's scream. Jennifer and Taylor rushed from the room and followed the scream down the hall.
As they reached and entered the room. Blair and Kelly had beaten them already. As they rushed in Blair and Kelly had a startled look on there face and thats when they turned to see what the problem was.
Blonde hair layed all over the floor and scattered through out the room. They noticed a message written in hot pink lipstick on the mirror in the room. The words on the mirror were a bunch of, "HAHAHAHAHAHA". The lipstick was from Yasmine herself.
Yasmine cried and was mumbling words. Everyone didn't know how to approach her. That's when Jennifer strode over to her. Yasmine looked up in tears and Jennifer held out her arms to her. She held her as both of the girls let out tears.
Yasmine: Who???? Who would do this?
Jennifer: Where gonna catch this bastard...The killer kept you alive for a reason Yasmine.....It could of been worst.
Kelly: You guys we should get out of here....
Kelly made her way to the door. Jennifer was still holding Yasmine.
Jennifer: WHERE ARE YOU GOING KELLY!!? ITS TOO DANGEROUS TO BE WONDERING OFF!
Kelly: HOLD UP I THINK I SAW AN EXIT BACK HERE!
Jennifer looked up at Blair who was still in shock. He seemed to have a unsteady mood.
Jennifer: GO GET HER BLAIR!
Blair nodded and trailed off after her. Jennifer and Taylor helped Yasmine who was still walking uneven.
They called out after Blair and Kelly down the dim light hallway. They weren't able to watch which way they went and continued to call out Blair and Kelly's names.
Taylor: Kelly!!! BLAIR!!!
They turned the corner and walked down a few steps which seem to lead down an outer exit. Thats when they saw Blair just standing there stairing at something through the gated doors.
Jennifer: WHERE'S KELLY??
He didn't answer and they called out to him louder and still no answer.
Jennifer: BLAIR! ANSWER ME! WHERE'S KELLY?
As they reached the gate doors they saw what he was looking at.
It was Kelly.....and her body layed there with her eyes open and blood splattered all over her face...........
Kelly was dead....................
A/N: THANK YOU GUYS FOR ALL THE FEEDBACK IT KEEPS ME GOING! LET ME KNOW WHAT YOU THINK! ;)
21st Nov 2009, 09:15 PM
Aww jeez now i have no clue who it might be! This is awesome, i want more!!!!
22nd Nov 2009, 08:54 PM
Aww jeez now i have no clue who it might be! This is awesome, i want more!!!!
Yeah, bang, there goes my theory! Maybe it's Yasmine and the hair and lipstick thing was a ploy to throw Jennifer and everyone off the scent. Because isn't the killer supposed to be in the back of Sasha's car?
24th Nov 2009, 12:02 AM
That's what we were supposed to believe. But until Sasha's fate is made official, it's hard to imagine how that could be possible and yet for Kelly to end up dead. Could it be a mistake to assume a single killer?
26th Nov 2009, 03:17 AM
Jennifer looked back at Blair.
Blair: I-I-found her like this.......
Jennifer looked back down at Kelly's body. Taylor came up and put his hand on Jennifer's shoulder.
Taylor: Look...we need to keep moving. The killer got to her, so now we need to get the hell out of here before the killer gets to us.
Taylor looked around at everyone to see if they were on the same page as he was. However everyone seemed lost. It was as if the killer was always lurking in the shadows.
Jennifer pulled open the gate doors and they all stepped over Kelly's lifeless body. They followed the narrow hallway that lead them to the only door. As they opened the door they walked into the hot tub room and someone startled them.
Detective Pleasant was startled as well and her gun was pointing to them as they entered.
Detective Pleasant: Where the hell did you guys run off too!?
Jennifer: How did you know were to find us?
Detective Pleasant: I didn't.....as of now. This entire estate is a crime scene. What? You didn't think your father would notice you were gone? Thank goodness I found you before someone else did.
Jennifer: are friend is dead...her body is back there...we were trying to find Yasmine and Sasha......
Detective Pleasant: I need to escort all of you back to your homes...
Jennifer: No! Were not seperating...not after all the murders that are still happening.....My friends are falling one by one.....Now tell me Detective...How did you know where exactly we were?
Detective Pleasant: This isnt a good time....not now....
Jennifer: TELL ME! (she screamed)
Detective Pleasant: Sasha's car was found four miles from here crashed into a tree. Her father's head was found here. The caretaker of this estate's body is lying outside in a body bag and it seems from your understanding that another body is back inside the house.....That total's about four more murders to the list. Are you happy?
Jennifer was right....the killer was still at large.
They walked in and Jennifer's father ran up towards her.
Mr.Willington: Jennifer! I can't believe you would run off at a time like this! Whats wrong with you?
Jennifer: Am sorry.....my friends were in danger...
Detective Pleasant: May I speak to you Mr.Willington
Mr.Willington: Will discuss this matter later....
Detective Pleasant and Mr.Willington strode off to the corner to talk.
Jennifer walked up to Yasmine.
Jennifer: Yasmine I think you should take a hot shower...I have some fresh clothes upstairs in my bedroom....
Yasmine: A hot shower sounds good.
Yasmine followed Jennifer upstairs. While Blair trailed off to use the phone. Taylor examined all the comotion. That's when two people walked in. The first being Lieutenant Downey and another woman.
Lieutenant Downey: We apologize Mr.Willington to come in openly...but its urgent news. Detective Pleasant may we speak to you in private?
Lieutenant Downey: This is Amanda Brooking....
Detective Pleasant: What's this all about that's so urgent?
Amanda: Your off the case....all of you.
Detective Pleasant: excuse me?
Amanda: People are dying left and right detective...and since the only two leads you and your team have are a young man who is dead and a escape mental patient with no full proof of his crimes....am taking you all off the case. This is no longer your investigation....its the state..you have a problem you can talk to the Senator
Detective Pleasant: Wait I don't understand -
Amanda: WHAT DON'T YOU UNDERSTAND DETECTIVE? You just now have five murders pop up.....and you guys are not even close to solving the case.
Detective Pleasant: Five??? What do you mean five?
Lieutenant Downey: Its Mr.Connor's...his body was found.....he's been murdered....
Amanda and Lieutenant Downey walked outside to there car. Jennifer was now downstairs watching them leave while Blair went upstairs.
Detective Pleasant walked up to Jennifer and pulled her aside.
Jennifer: Whats going on?
Detective Pleasant: Am going downtown to the Police Station, there's gonna be one cop here for just a short time. You guys won't be alone for long. There sending more officers here to guard you all.....but I need to ask you a favor..
Jennifer: What is it?
Detective Pleasant pulled out what seemed to be a small button.
Detective Pleasant: Wear this....its a tracking device. Am scared your gonna be next so, for your own safety. Please?
Jennifer put it on her jeans where it blended in easliy. Detective Pleasant smiled and walked out the door and trailed off into the car. Jennifer looked at Taylor and they both went upstairs.
Jennifer and Taylor trailed off into her room.
Taylor: What is it???
Jennifer: Don't you think its odd that Tiffany and her father are dead? and now Sasha and her father are dead? So wouldn't you think--
Taylor finished her sentence
Taylor: Yasmine might be next.....
Jennifer: or her father.....
That's when they heard a loud thud. Like something hit the floor hard. Then they heard it once more..
Taylor and Jennifer rushed out of the room and Jennifer noticed the bathroom door opened....
She rushed forward only to find Yasmine on the floor covered in her own puddle of blood. Jennifer screamed out for the officer and her father and as they made there way downstairs. The officer was lying dead on the floor.
Her father was crying and mumbling...and thats when they turned to see what was going on...
Mr.Willington: NOT LIKE THIS!!! NOT LIKE THIS!! (he cried out)
Jennifer stood there speechless
Blair was holding the gun..........
A/N: HEY GUYS! THANKS FOR ALL THE FEEDBACK! HOPE YOU ALL LIKE IT AND AS ALWAYS LET ME KNOW WAT YOU THINK :P
26th Nov 2009, 04:56 AM
AH! Blair?! I didnt even think it could be Blair!
26th Nov 2009, 12:01 PM
AH! Blair?! I didnt even think it could be Blair!
Me neither!! :blink:
I wonder if anybody else is going to die, or if Jennifer is going to try to stall him until the cops can get there!
4th Dec 2009, 12:59 AM
Jennifer: Blair!? Put the gun down!
Jennifer's father continued to mumble words and cry out aloud.
Blair: Shut up! Just shut the hell up!
Jennifer: Your not gonna get away this Blair! The cops are on there way..they'll find you...even if you kill us.
Blair: Just shut the hell up!
Taylor came rushing down next to Jennifer and startled Blair. The gun shout came out loud and clear.
Jennifer screamed with fear and Taylor went down to the floor.
Taylor layed on the floor still and quiet.
Blair: Shut up! Get up off the floor! NOW!
Jennifer stood and looked Blair in the eyes. There were so many things racing in her mind at the moment she couldn't focus.
Blair: Were leaving.....
Jennifer: were not going anywhere....
Blair held up the gun pointing it at Jennifer and her father.
Blair: You'll do what I say...Now!
Blair led them outside into his car.
Jennifer and her father stood side by side.
Blair continued to look around numerous times. Jennifer could see the sweat rolling off his face. Like he was so unsure of what he was doing. How could Blair be the killer and if so why? Its all she could think of.
Jennifer: Now what?
It happened so fast Jennifer didn't have time to react. All she saw was Blair's hand headed towards her face. Then nothing. Everything went black. Pitch black......it was like that forever it seemed.
When Jennifer's eyes did open. It was still black. She could tell there was some kind of material over here eyes. She tried moving but her hands were tied.
Mr.Willington: Jennifer....are you awake?
Jennifer: Dad?? Is that you?
Mr.Willington: Yes...am close to you but am tied up.
Jennifer: same here.....what happened?
Mr.Willington: He knocked us out cold......I don't know where we are. Everything is gonna be fine....
Jennifer: Do you hear that dad?
Mr.Willington: What is it?
Jennifer: Waves....we must be close to the ocean.
Then a door creaked open and foot steps could be heard walking in. The wooden floors made awful creaks.
A deep voice said. It sounded just like the voice that she heard over the phone before her mother was killed. Hearing it in person made it sound more mechanical than anything.
"UNTIE HER BLINDFOLD.." (the voice said)
She opened her eyes to see Blair standing next to her and that's when she looked back to see Kelly.
Jennifer: Kelly???? Your suppose to be - DEAD!
Kelly: Suppose to be......but am not. Am standing right here. Alive....
Jennifer: NO-NO-I saw your body! You were dead!
Kelly: Sweetheart...all you saw was blood on my face. But first things first...what do you think of this dress?
Jennifer stayed quiet in shock.
Kelly: It was her dress......
Kelly: Tiffany Hillson......
Jennifer: Your a fuckin sick bitch....you know that?
Kelly: Blair what time is it?
Kelly: Good its almost time.....
Jennifer: Almost time for what??!!
Kelly: For the truth Jennifer.....and at midnight...you''ll finally know.
Jennifer: Why midnight?
(Kelly laughed once more)
Kelly: Silly! Did you honestly really forget? Its your birthday.....and boy, oh, boy, do I got a gift for you.
A/N: Let me know what you think! :king:
4th Dec 2009, 01:01 AM
How dare you leave it off like this! I want MOAR NOW!
4th Dec 2009, 03:57 PM
I just KNEW there was something wrong with Kelly when she first appeared, but you completely threw me off with her "dying"! I can't wait for the next chapter!
5th Dec 2009, 01:40 AM
(DING! A bell went off somewhere in the room)
Kelly: It's time Jennifer....time you know the truth. (she looked at Blair)
Kelly: Blair you kept your end of the bargin..now am gonna keep mine.
Kelly pulled out the gun and the silencer went off and Blair was dead. Jennifer saw so many people die it didnt seem to effect her.
Kelly turned towards Jennifer.
Kelly: Guns are so boring.....there no fun..Isn't that right Mr.Willington?
(Kelly turned back towards Jennifer)
Kelly: Happy Birthday Jennifer! I've waited for this moment along time....
Jennifer: What do you mean along time?
Kelly: Always trying to ruin the surprise arent you? Hey you wanna see what I used to kill all your friends?
Kelly: I know what your thinking....I didn't use an axe...a meat cleaver is so much more fun...However I did make you a birthday cake!
Kelly pulled out a cake and put it right out in front of Jennifer.
Kelly: Don't tell me you prefer chocolate?
Jennifer: You really are sick and twisted...you know that? Why?
Kelly: Ask your father...tell her John....tell her the real truth...
Jennifer: What are you talking about? Dad?
Her father sat in the chair quiet.
Kelly: Am not the only one in this room with a few dark secrets....your father's beach house holds lots of secrets...this is were he and your sick friends fathers did it......
Mr.Willington: Don't listen to her Jennifer! She's lying!
Kelly: Am lying!? You kidnapped innocent girls! you guys brought them here....and then raped them, torture them and then killed them.....and am the sick and twisited one? Don't think so......
Jennifer: YOUR LYING!
Kelly: Am I??? Fine if your not going tell her John....then I'll show her.
Kelly went over to the tv and put it on.....Thats when she saw the video.
Kelly: Oh it gets better....shall I forward it to the part where they chop off her head?
Mr.Willington: AM GONNA KILL YOU BITCH!
Kelly: I highly doubt it....
Jennifer was in shock of what she saw. She could hear the innocent girl cry and scream for help.
Kelly: Revenge is sweet.....very sweet. You and your friends were so easy..It wasn't hard to set up all the traps. You all fell into them like puzzle pieces.
Jennifer: So now what? You kill us?
Kelly: No...at least not yet. Not until you know all of the truth. Tiffany, Yasmine, Sasha, Blair, and you. All five of your fathers created this filth. They conducted this for years....a little sick game of murder. There the true killers of Woodsberry. They played it smart...kidnapping girls from out of town. To not draw in any attention from Woodsberry itself. Until one night, when they took innocent Mary Fleming...kidnapped her, raped her, and guess what? Faith took a turn they five weren't expecting...she was the only one who escaped......my mother. You remember her right John? She was the only that ever got away.....
Jennifer: How is killing there children helping you?
Kelly: I wanted them to know what it feels like to have everything taken from you. My mother kept it secret....fear of being found by them. It drove her mad and she killed herself with this very meat clever. However she left a diary behind. A diary that contained the very names of your fathers. She managed to get the names of your fathers before she left this very beach house. Now all of you know what it's like losing someone you love.
Jennifer: So why us last?
Kelly: Very good question to ask Jennifer.....that night my mother was raped. Someone made a accident...
Kelly: HAPPY BIRTHDAY JENNIFER......AM YOUR HALF SISTER.....
A/N: IT'S NOT OVER YET GUYS! THE TRUTH WILL UNFOLD MORE IN THE NEXT CHAPTER.. :jest:
5th Dec 2009, 01:44 AM
Very good! I cant wait to read the ending, i was not expecting this!
5th Dec 2009, 03:03 AM
haha thanxs! am glad it intrested you! I know am trying to persude my bf to get us a new comp! i want sims 3!
5th Dec 2009, 04:23 AM
This is great ^_^ Excited for the next chapter.
5th Dec 2009, 01:07 PM
Cool story, i knew it was kelly, lol xD
5th Dec 2009, 03:02 PM
Woah, I did not see that coming!
5th Dec 2009, 06:58 PM
Talk about sick in the head. I couldn't imagine being in Jennifer's shoes after this story ends. With the revelations she's had and all the gut-wrenching losses of family and friends. If Kelly lets her survive, she'll probably be in therapy for the rest of her life.
You know it's funny though. As this story's risen to these reveals, a thought's started bubbling in my head. While I usually don't like horror stories like these, I'd love to read or see a POST-horror story. Where all the mayhem is over and folks who survived have to deal with the aftermath of a killing spree like this. The drama of that seems like it would be just as compelling as the twists and turns during the mayhem.
Not that I'm requesting this go into sequel mode once Kelly's dealt with. But just in general. There's something about how do you ever adapt and go on after horrors such as these that intrigues me.
6th Dec 2009, 12:14 AM
Talk about sick in the head. I couldn't imagine being in Jennifer's shoes after this story ends. With the revelations she's had and all the gut-wrenching losses of family and friends. If Kelly lets her survive, she'll probably be in therapy for the rest of her life.
Hmm, yeah, she's lost everyone, hasn't she? All her friends are dead, her mom is dead and her dad is not who she thought he was! That really must be a living nightmare.
7th Dec 2009, 05:21 AM
Hmm, yeah, she's lost everyone, hasn't she? All her friends are dead, her mom is dead and her dad is not who she thought he was! That really must be a living nightmare.
No kidding. And while I wouldn't be the one to want to take it on, I can just see a goldmine of writing material in a character like her in the aftermath of a situation like this story's. Does she end up in a mental hospital and the world of wild supporting characters you'd have there? Does she manage to stay functional but have extreme trust issues? Does she stay someone to root for or have her value systems been destroyed by all the savagery Kelly's committed and why? Is she still able to love? What are her attitudes about sex now? Maybe she withdraws from the world and tries to survive somewhere remote as a hermit woman. So many possibilites and directions to go.
8th Dec 2009, 09:33 PM
Jennifer: NO! IT'S NOT TRUE! ITS NOT TRUE!
Kelly: Oh but it is Jennifer.....it's very much true.
Mr.Willington began to move around and try to untie himself from the chair like a mad man. Kelly finally started to strangle him by the neck. Her fingers crushing his throat and Jennifer's scream echoed through out the room. Finally Mr.Willington fell to the floor.....Jennifer began to sob.
Jennifer: Just kill me already.....do it! (she screamed)
Kelly seemed to be out of breath before she began talking again.
Jennifer: Just kill me please....just get it over with! (she begged)
Kelly: Do you really think I would kill our father that fast? He has alot more coming to him....and him dying a fast death doesn't do it justice.
Jennifer: You killed my friends. You killed my mother....My boyfriend....How much more do you think you can shatter me?
Kelly: Yes...I do apologize for your dear sweet Taylor. He was never part of the plan to be killed. However he was at the wrong place at the wrong time. You know I didn't think Blair had it in him. I thought he would bail out...but he killed off Yasmine and Taylor. Good for him, too bad for his father.
Jennifer: am assuming there dead too?
Kelly: Of course you didn't know that Blair's real only last family member was his father. He was a foster child here......his real father was in a coma and when I told him that if he didn't help me with the plan then he would loose his father. Of course I kidnapped his father and killed him long ago before he knew any of the real truth you and I know. His father was apart of this sick game. Killing innocent girls. So as payback I schemed my way into his head. Making him kill Taylor and Yasmine.
Jennifer: You more twisted than I thought...
Kelly: HEY! don't forget who the real twisted fucks are. The five fathers...Of course I originally thought Tiffany was my real sister. Until Jason decided to crash my little party. Thus making him my next victim. Then I got samples from Yasmine, Sasha, and Blair. Nothing, then you were so different from any of them it was so easy to get closer to you. As for your mother, well now you know what it's like to not have one.
Jennifer: FUCK YOU!
Kelly: Were one big happy family now! Me, you and Daddy!
"STEP A SIDE" A VOICE CALLED OUT AND OUT FROM THE SHADOWS DETECTIVE PLEASANT STEPPED FORWARD.
Kelly: It's the hero of the day!
Detective Pleasant: I have the whole confession....it's over.
Kelly: Is it really? Oh darn I was just about to get to the part where you come in...
Detective Pleasant: Oh really? and what might that be?
Kelly: Oh come on detective! You didn't solve all your cases so easily...you didn't exactly use the justice system the way your suppose to....isnt that right?
Detective Pleasant: What are you talking about?
Kelly: Don't play stupid with me! You have some dark secrets yourself....locking up innocent people...you didn't get my message? Willard Rossling? You remember him don't you? Locking up innocent people....conivicting innocent people. Doesn't ring a bell?
Detective Pleasant: Your under arrest! Put your hands up!
A startled noise from Mr.Willington came about and Detective Pleasant was quickly startled. Jennifer saw it happen in a flash. Detective Pleasant's gun was kicked out of her hand. Kelly had cracked a bottle of some sort and was trying to cut Detective Pleasant.
However Pleasant was able to uppercut Kelly before she herself was hurt. The candles fell as Kelly tumbled on the floor. The flames quickly rose. Detective Pleasant untied her. Jennifer began to drag her father out. While Pleasant grabbed the video tape in the tv.
Kelly was trapped in the corner of the room. She watched as the flames grew higher and higher leaving her trapped in a room full of flames.
Jennifer dragged her father out as far as she could. She watched the little beach house burn up and be swallowed into flames. Screams could be heard. They were Kelly's screams.
A few mintues later the entire little house began to fall apart and soon later it collapsed off the hill and tumbled down into the ocean.
The police arrived a short time later and Jennifer had trailed off down the hill to watch the ocean waves.
Jennifer watched the wave hit the sand. She felt so lonley in the world. It was if all the lights were turned off on her. She couldn't see the lights anymore and she didn't think she ever would again.
Detective Pleasant was now standing behind her.
Detective Pleasant: The police squad is here now. It's best if we get you out of here.
Jennifer stood quiet watching the waves and feeling the cool breeze against her skin.
Detective Pleasant: I do have some good news for you....
Jennifer: Good news Detective? I don't think there could be any good news...ever.
Detectice Pleasant: That's fair.....but I thought you would like to know that Taylor and Yasmine are alive. There gonna make it.
Then a little light inside her flickered right back on....
8th Dec 2009, 09:53 PM
OMG i cant wait for the next chapter!
8th Dec 2009, 10:10 PM
Kelly is so not dead! Can't wait to see where this goes next!
8th Dec 2009, 11:19 PM
Jennifer dazed into the glass wall that seperated it from her and her father. Who was now locked up in here at Blackgate Aslyum. The door opened and in came Detective Pleasant. It had been a one week after the chaos. The media right and left. Jennifer Willington had become a big name in a small amount of time.
Detective Pleasant: I Heard you were in the neighborhood. This is a far drive from Woodsberry.
Jennifer: I still have mix feelings about all this. It's not easy for me. I wanna be here but at the same time It doesn't feel right to visit or see him. So finally I thought I just come. Regardless of my mix emotions I wanna be in the loop.
Detective Pleasant: I can't imagine what your going through.....am sorry. Am always here if you need somebody to talk too.
Jennifer: I find myself waking up at random times of the night. Any updates?
Detective Pleasant: His larnyx are crushed. Something that Kelly girl must of had a hobby of doing. No records or history of a Kelly Fleming. She doesnt exist. All the evidence left behind were burned in the fire. Fingerprints, the entire works. Who ever she was, she really did have all this planned to the very last dot. However as far as your father goes, the court hasnt made a decsion on what they want to do. Not until they fully have the entire evidence. For now, he'll be locked up in here.
Jennifer: Thats not the update I was talking about....
Detective Pleasant: No.....we haven't found the body. The firefighters looked and looked. No bones, nothing. Lots of pieces fell down the hill and into the ocean. Were still looking Jennifer, were not giving up. The ocean is huge....Look, nobody could of escaped that house. It was so small there was only one exit and no windows. The chances of anyone living through that are extremely low.
There was a pause between them for a moment.
Jennifer: Hey, I never said thank you.
Detective Pleasant: C'mon kiddo. I'll walk you out.
Detective Pleasant and Jennifer walked out of the room.
Jennifer had every right to worry. Every right to wake up in the middle of the night screaming. Kelly Fleming's body was never found and that would truly terrify anyone.
John Willington sat there looking at the wall. He was the only man out of five that was alive. The five men who commited acts so horrible it was almost sounded so untrue. Howevery after the story unfolded to the media. Such acts were wished untrue.
A shadow appeared out the dark.
John Willington could hear the glass door open behind him. Heels clicking on the cold cement floor. Then he looked up to see a familiar face.
Kelly: Hello Father......
He watched her pull a chair up next to him
Kelly: I know what your thinking......what do you think about my new hair? Beautiful right? It's actually a custom made wig made from Mr.Connors daughter. You remember her right? Jennifer's friend? Anywho.....
She looked into his eyes. John's eyes were saying many things.
Kelly: I made a promise were gonna be one big happy family....and you know I like to keep my promises daddy.
Kelly leaned over the chair and whispered into his ear...
Kelly: I have a plan.......
8th Dec 2009, 11:43 PM
Hey everyone! Am so happy to finally be finished with this story! I've been working on this story since March! WOW! Am so happy for it to be done before the new year Lol. I know you guys enjoyed it as much as I enjoyed writing it and creating it. Thank you to everyone who has read it! I love using my imagination and thanks to SIMS I can express my stories and share them with everyone. Also thank you to every creator who's costumes and objects and action hacks were used in this story because with out your imagination I wouldn't have been able to share my vision of the story. So thankyou! I spent alot of time brainstorming on this story and I must say I actually had a nightmare about a murderer after me because I was brainstorming a litte TOO much lol. But hey If thats what It takes to create a story then so be it! I will continue to create and write other short stories. I have a few ideas up my sleeve but haven't really settled on what story I wanna tackle next. My goal is always to create something new and different. So until next time....see ya later!
P.S. Share your thoughts on the overview of the story! Any questions leave them below! :D
P.S.S: As for a sequel. Am not quite sure. The first thing to start off would be if readers would want to read another chapter of Jennifer Willington. Second, If I did create a sequel. I would have to ask myself, Do I think I could create a story worth telling to be a sequel?
So Let me know what you think because now you know, Who Killed Tiffany Hillson!
9th Dec 2009, 12:12 AM
This was great! You really wrote a great story and you sure kept me guessing the whole time! I cant wait to read anymore stories you create!
9th Dec 2009, 12:12 AM
Well, I know what I think here. With the way you ended the story, it seems only natural to do a sequel and show what Kelly's new plan is. Kelly having perished in the collapse of the beach house would have been a more satisfying conclusion if you weren't going to do a sequel.
That said, I don't think I'd want a second Kelly rampage story. As I was saying the other day, if there was an extension of Jennifer's story, how she, Taylor, and Yasmine cope now would be much more interesting than having them have to survive another ordeal. There are plenty of horror stories but not many post-horrors.
9th Dec 2009, 12:15 AM
Completely agree with Mrs.Kuma, I definitely want to see more of your writing here! This story was just so good, you knew exactly where to end each chapter to make me keep wanting more! I would rather like a sequel (yes, I'm still wanting more!), but I can understand if you didn't want to write one, and I'd probably read whatever you wrote next anyway! :)
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