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Story Time Contest: Hero Edition
28th Jun 2012 at 11:50 PM
Okay here is my story
I hope I put this in right. I am going to put it in a spoiler so it takes up less space on the thread :D
This is a different Genre for me (normaly I am all Sci-fi, but this is more realistic), so I hope it turns out okay
The sun was bright, lighting up this world filled with evil with a bright goodness that seemed infallible. It shone everywhere, gracing the area with warmth. Suki watched it's reflection in the water. It reminded her of Owl, but he was not here now. He was safe. That much she was sure of. Suki sat in her meditative pose and closed her eyes again.
A few feet away, Bohdin watched her deep concentration with his pupil, Esho. He looked on with understanding, while Esho, who was still learning, peered on with utter confusion.
" Bohdin-H˘shi* I don't understand."
"In time you will, Esho. She is just a lost soul; Broken and betrayed by far too many. She seeks forgiveness."
"What did she do? Why does she need forgiveness?"
"A lot. She has done many horrible things for people who she believed were good; But these things do not matter anymore, she does not want to be known for her past. She wants to be known for her present and future; for her decision to change her ways and become a better person."
"But what did she do?"
The monk chuckled to himself. Children will never learn, he thought. "Alright then, I will tell you her story. From the beginning."
"I win!" Yelled a tiny, head-strong girl for the tenth time in a row.
"I give up, Suki-chan!" Whined her friend. They had been playing different games for over an hour, and as usual, Suki was winning.
"One more game, Bohdin-chan! Please!"
"Fine; but I get to choose." He agreed, and then paused to think. "Hide-and-seek?"
"Okay. I'll hide first!" She answered enthusiastically and bounced off to hide.
Suki ran off down the corridor and turned onto another hallway in her huge mansion-like house. She kept running as fast as her tiny legs would bring her until she reached her father's office and peered inside. She knew she was not allowed to enter, her father had made that clear on numerous occasions, but this was a serious time; hide-and-seek was a cause for risks in her mind.
Suki crept inside the large room and looked around. The walls were covered in books in their cases, and there were fancy couches on each side of the room. In the center was her father's desk. It seemed so large compared to her small seven-year old size. Suki snuck around it and hid behind it. Bohdin will never catch me now, she thought.
A few minutes had passed when she heard footsteps enter the room.
It couldn't be Bohdin,
she thought to herself.
He would never come into Father's study.
Bohdin was not the adventurous, dare-devil that she was. Suki maneuvered her position and popped her head up to see who had come in. As quick as she was up, she went back down. It was her father.
How do I get out?
Those words were ringing through her mind along with an alarming sense of fear. If her father found out that she was here, she would be in very big trouble. Looking around, she realized there was no reasonable escape route, so she kept quiet hoping that he would leave soon.
"How soon can you get it done?" Mr. Toshihiro said. He had his phone up to his ear and was staring out the window from his office, looking down at the city below him.
"Well get it done!" He barked. "He caused harm to our business. I want him taken care of. Understand?" There was a pause. "Good. Finish it tonight. I want him dead."
He turned off his phone at the exact second that Suki moved.
"Suki?" He said, his voice much calmer than when he was on the phone. "Come out."
"I'm sorry, Father! I didn't mean to hear your conversation. I wasn't sneaking around, we were just playing a game! I swear-"
"Enough." He said angrily. "You know the rules. You are not to 'play' in my office! You are not to come into my office at all!" He paused. "You are too old to be playing games, as well."
Suki looked down. "I am sorry, Father."
"It was my fault, Mr. Toshihiro-sama!" Bohdin came running into the room. "It was my fault! I said we should play the game. Don't punish Suki-san!"
"Your fault? Were you the one who came into my office?"
"No, sir. It was my fault she did go into your office though, Sir."
"Well I have decided. You will receive no punishment, Suki. Instead, you will no longer be allowed to 'play'. You will come to work with me and learn. You are to take over the business when you are older, anyway." He turned toward Bohdin. "You may go, boy."
Bohdin gave Suki a sympathetic look. "Yes, sir. Bye, Suki." He said, turned, and left.
Silence radiated through the room.
"Why do you disobey me so often?" Mr. Toshihiro mumbled to himself.
"Who was that on the phone, Papa?"
Her father sighed, not wanting to take out his anger on his only daughter: his only child.
"It was... a Business partner. You will meet him today. You will also meet another man who is a very bad man. He stole from us and was plotting to take down our business."
"What are you going to do with him?"
"Does her father really kill people?"
"Yes. He was the cause of many deaths. He had shot people himself, as well as given the order for people to be shot. He was a bad man..." Bohdin trailed off and looked back at Suki.
"What?" Esho asked.
"Well... I wonder if she would have turned out the way she did if she had her mother still by her side." He paused and looked back at Esho who was eager to hear more.
I had kept in touch over the years; but the next time I actually saw her, we were both sixteen
, he began.
Suki was walking down the street in the city, heading toward a large building that belonged to her father. It was nearing five o'clock, and Suki wanted to be anywhere but her destination. Sadly on her part, she could not refuse the visit to the esteemed Maple Leaf Hotel where her father and other colleagues were waiting.
"Good evening, Miss Toshihiro-san," said the doorman as he let her in. She nodded and smiled to him in reply and quickly made her way up the elevator to the penthouse. Inside, her father and a man were waiting along with an unknown person sitting in a chair. The man in the chair was badly bruised and was drifting in and out of consciousness.
"What is it now?" Suki demanded.
"Now, now. Is that the way to greet your fellow colleagues?" Said her father's employee. His name was Hotaka, and he was very fearsome to behold. He was one of Mr. Toshihiro's strongest men, and by far the meanest of them, too.
"What do you want?" Suki said again, showing emotions to him.
"Aww come on Suki-chan! Be nice." He said jokingly to tease her.
"Do not call me that."
"Enough." Her father said. "There is work to be done." The man in the chair began to stir. "He needs to be dealt with. Would you like to do the honors, Suki?"
Mr. Toshihiro had been using Suki to do a lot of his dirty work lately, and for fear of her life, she had done as he asked. She still had nightmares from one of her last jobs. She had to torture a man for information, and it was not an appealing thing to witness.
"Fine." She said coldly. She grabbed the gun from behind her back and shot the man in cold-blood. It was over in seconds and not as dramatic as how movies make it. It was a loud noise and then nothing. The man was sitting one second and still sitting the next, just in a different position; it was as if he had not died at all. "Who was he?" She asked while putting her gun away.
"A man that had to be dealt with." Her father answered: the same answer he said every time she asked.
"Fine. Don't tell me. I am leaving." She turned and left.
Suki stormed out of the hotel in a hurry and rushed down the side walk, right into a pedestrian.
"I am so sorry!"
"It's nothing..." The boy said back to her and paused. "Suki-san? It's Bohdin!"
"Bohdin-san! How are you?"
"I'm good, and you?"
"I'm okay." She said quietly.
"It's been years since I have seen you," he said. "But I can still tell when you are lying to me. What's going on?"
"A lot. Too much sometimes.
I tell myself that I'll be strong.
I-I just don't know if I can be anymore."
CC:Skin, eyes, clothes, store items
Plot Point:Mysterious Past
Hero Subtype: The Atoner
Picture Amount: 13
Excerpt: "I tell myself that I'll be strong."
(**Hoshi is a Japanese Honorific used to identify with Buddhist Monks
Any other name ending (e.g. -San, -Chan, etc.) are also honorifics, but they are more common)
"Don't mistake coincidence for fate."