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#1 Old 18th Oct 2007 at 7:31 PM
my poetry
i want to know what people think of my poetry.
if people want me to i will post more but i will now only post my best one.
the 'happy' poetrry is bout now, the darker from earlier, i only started this september writing poetry and the dark ones are from august, september, the other from around this time( october)

Crumbling cliff

the nights are cold and dark
with you there, there on the other side
i thought love was true
but it wasn't cause you crossed the bridge
you left me dying here on this crumbling cliff
and once the piece i'm standing on will fall too
but you didn't took me with you
instead you started to speed up the process
you left me here to die on this crumbling cliff
and you crossed the bridge
the bridge that seperates life and dead
you crossed the bridge to live
so then i shout to you, standing on this crumbling cliff
"why didn't you take me with you?"
right before i fall in the deep black hole of dead

I hope you like it, tell me what you think of it and if people want me i will post some more.
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#2 Old 24th Oct 2007 at 10:49 PM
wow, that is really good. I love the ending. Very well written. You did a really good job on it. =)
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#3 Old 25th Oct 2007 at 6:01 AM
thanks,
this is another one i wrote a few weeks ago. this was my first poem in english, as i am belgian.

I cry

My heart dies
It tears my soul apart
Dead is my only exit
But just not right now
Dead will come soon
Your heart will slowly die
Cause you live with the guilt
Bout my painful dead

Nooo

Not here not right now
I will stay strong
You can’t kill my soul
Cause I will stay strong
My soul will never die
But I will kill yours
Cause you broke my heart
My heart will stay strong
I will stay strong
I will haunt you down
Tear your soul apart
Like you did to me
hope you like it :D
#4 Old 25th Oct 2007 at 8:42 PM
wow. I really love this one too. I like the sudden turaround and the way you described the emotions. Nice job.
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#5 Old 26th Oct 2007 at 5:51 AM
thank you,
this is another one of me, (i wrote all my poems starting from july this year till now)

scar

I wear a mark on my soul
From when you tried to kill it
When I felt your hand there
I started to freeze
I said no, but you didn’t understand
It broke my heart
But the wounds healed
Still the scar stayed
But now I know
Who you are
And it isn’t the sweet guy I knew
So crawl back to your stone
Ad stay underneath there
As I know I will find love
And you need to live with the rape
Forever locked in your heart

this one is a very personal. thant's why my signature is also a part out of my poem.
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#6 Old 4th Nov 2007 at 8:03 AM
the one
The one I love, the one I want
Is you
You’re the one for me
The one who waits for me,
Respects my past
I see you and me
Together in the future
Spending our lives together, forever
I want to kiss your lips, touch your body
It will take time, but I can wait
I want to wait, so nothing breaks
Love is made from glass
But I will carry ours on clouds
So nothing breaks
I want to feel your gentle touch
A passionate kiss
I’m fallen in love
In love with you
And it’s forever
And once
Hopefully soon
My dream will come true
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#7 Old 4th Nov 2007 at 8:10 AM
I dream,
A marvellous dream bout you,
If you had any idea
What I feel for you
You would kiss me
And tell me you loved me
That is my dream
And when I get up in the morning
With an enjoying smile on my face
I am surprised to see
The dream becoming real

and this is a poem i made for my exboyfriend, it can be rude i know, but that's just my style, people who hurt me as much as he did you would attack them too

Ending?
You said: ”leave me alone”
I respected that
But 5 minutes later
You were already there again

What are you doing?
What is your meaning?
I only ask you why!

There are living a million strangers around me
But you became a friend and even more
Now all is a dream
Perhaps even a nightmare

What are you doing?
What is your meaning?
I only ask you why!

Decide for once
What is your final answer
For once
You need to choose the path in life
Make your f**** mind up
And what is your final answer

and this is another one bout him, this is a rather long, but my friend in school is making a song of it.

fool and deceive
You fooled me, deceived me
Toyed me around
Like I don’t exist
But now I crawl back on my feet

You lied to me when you said your life was normal
But you’re not an average teen
You are a model, you design clothes
But guess what, once I’m done with you
You’re not a model anymore

You crushed my soul
But I got back on the ground
You fooled me, deceived me
Toyed me around
Like I don’t exist
But now I crawl back on my feet

Your sweet face isn’t so sweet anymore
Inside there lays beast
That is unleashed
You told me “it doesn’t work”
Yeah you’re right it doesn’t
I don’t live with a betrayer

You fooled me, deceived me
Toyed me around
Like I don’t exist
But now I crawl back on my feet

This was all your choice
You know I’m not shallow
So it was fine to me
But not now, noo not now
The lies took way to long
Yu told me too much of them
Your soul it is weak, your soul is weak

You fooled me, deceived me
Toyed me around
Like I don’t exist
But now I crawl back on my feet

It was all just a game
A f**** nasty game
But my heart doesn’t shatter
Cause I know I deserve better
And one day I will meet the right one
But you missed your chance
So it’s goodbye to you

You fooled me, deceived me
Toyed me around
Like I don’t exist
But now I crawl back on my feet

You’re a f**** fool
The fool I loved
But now I’m over you
Cause you’re not worth
You’re not worth me
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