View Full Version : Can't go On *Epilogue* Waking Dreams
2nd Dec 2006, 08:41 AM
2nd Dec 2006, 01:04 PM
5 Months, that was all it had been, it sometimes felt like a week, Diana couldn't understand that, it should feel like a lifetime. She was hungry, so she started to make lunch, but she didn't really care, Her mind was still with the day 5 months ago, when it had all changed for good. She started eating, but it was mechanical and automatic, it was something she needed to, but it was not what she wanted to do. She didn't want to eat, she just wanted to go back 5 months, but she couldn't do that.
It felt strange really, Diana thought as she glanced up at the giant picture in front of her, she had everything she wanted, a nice bungalow, a loving family, and so many other things, but there was something missing, A something that could never be found, a hole that could never be sewn up. Diana didn't know what she could do about it, she didn't know how she would go on. All she could do was write about how she felt about this in a story, it was all she could think of doing to temporarily fill this hole of guilt she had to live with from now on.
Diana heard a recognisable whining coming from near where the TV was, Rosie must be feeling lonely, so she went over toher and began to rub her belly, she had to take care of the little spaniel, she was all she had left.
Time passed in a whirl and sooner than she expected it was 8:00. Yawning widely, she went to make herself dinner. Macaroni this time, something she had always loved. But, yet again, she wasn't eating this because she wanted to, she was eating because she needed to, to have food in her body to keep her going for another few days. All she wanted to do right now was to waste away and die, but then who would take care of Rosie? The little dog adored her, and wouldn't be able to take the pain if Diana selfishly killed herself.
Yawning widely, Diana walked to her bedroom. Rosie was curled up on the bed, sleeping. Normally, Diana would push her off, and tell her to use her own bed or she would be sleeping outside, but this time, she didn't really mind. Diana missed the warmth of another in the bed, and Rosie made good company. Although quite suddenly Diana remembered that she couldn't go to bed, not yet. The was still something she needed to do.
As she walked outside, a gentle breeze caressed her face, she put her hand up to her cheek, a tear trickling down her face. That had felt like Chris's touch, the wind's hand made his own. She walked up to the cold stone, stepping carefully to avoid steping on the daisies that were growing around it.
Diana noticed that some weeds had begun to invade on the turf, they had no place there. Diana kneeled down and gently pulled the weeds out. Then she touched the stone and closed her eyes. She could remember it as if it were yesterday, She and Chris were walking out the pizzeria, when a man high on drugs drove past an opened fire on them, if Chris hadn't used himself as a shield to protect her, she wouldn't be alive today, but she wished their places had been switched, that she had died and Chris had lived, but that wasn't about to happen. It broke her heart to be so close to him but so far away.
At long last, Diana changed into her victorian nightgown and got into bed. Every night, for 5 months, Diana had seen the moment of Chris's death as clearly as if she had been standing across the sidewalk, safe from the bullets. She would call and tell him to leave her, to save himself, but he couldn't hear her, she was looking at the memory, not the real thing. But maybe, what with Rosie there, things wouldn't be so bad. Diana knew that maybe, one day, she'd be able to forgive herself for what happened 5 months ago, but it wasn't going to be today, or tomorrow, she would just have to live through her pitiful life until then.
2nd Dec 2006, 01:05 PM
I hope that was good, I'll get Chapter 1 up ASAP as soon as I decide what to put in it
2nd Dec 2006, 01:41 PM
Certainly WAS good! I wan't to see more!
2nd Dec 2006, 01:54 PM
I am really looking forward to reading more of this story
2nd Dec 2006, 02:04 PM
thanks, I'm glad this has a good start, hey I might get a star if I'm lucky
EDIT: hey did I do the title picture Ok?
2nd Dec 2006, 02:45 PM
This looks like it will be good. I feel bad for her :( But hopefully she'll figure things out. Your pictures are a bit fuzzy, but not so much that they detract from the story once you get used to them.
2nd Dec 2006, 08:52 PM
ok good, I keep forgetting to improve the picture size and quality
Hey, how do you get a star?
EDIT: Hey guys could you rate this when you look at it?
And also the story will unfold as the chapters go on, at the end you will find out whether she finds love again, or she is never happy again, even I, who is writing the story, cannot wait to find out
4th Dec 2006, 09:04 PM
my dads rebuilt my whole computer recently, so chapter 1 is delayed for now until I get the right stuff back. sorry if I cause any unrest
7th Dec 2006, 07:32 AM
I guess you'll start replying again when I get the new chapter, ok I'll get started on that
8th Dec 2006, 05:59 AM
ohhhh more more!
8th Dec 2006, 05:38 PM
as my dads just rebuilt the computer I had to get everything back cos I lost the files, which means making diana again so chap 1 is delayed a bit
8th Dec 2006, 05:47 PM
I understand about loosing files and having to make Sims over again. I feel for you. This story is sad, but I'm looking forward to seeing what happens with Diana. Hopefully, some good things are coming for her. Your story is really well written and I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
8th Dec 2006, 08:09 PM
Aw, poor Diana... tis a really good start, though sad, and I want to read more! I love the big pretty lake picture things. Don't worry about it being delayed, we can wait!
8th Dec 2006, 08:58 PM
aww you guys are so nice, no update tomorrow though, I'll be going to to the lille christmas market tomorrow, for the whle day I'll be waking up at 4:30 tomorrow ads well, the idea doesn't delight me :P
11th Dec 2006, 10:33 PM
bad news people, for some reason I keep losing my progress and my cc so no update till thats fixed
12th Dec 2006, 02:09 AM
take your time :) *stills waits impatiently*
12th Dec 2006, 05:29 PM
lol, I just have to be careful not to lose my prog again :lol:
12th Dec 2006, 05:51 PM
gr8 story jen keep up the good work. <3 <3.
Cassie (ur sister =P)
13th Dec 2006, 07:39 AM
my sister? but I've never seen you before! :lol: just kidding cass, thanls
17th Dec 2006, 10:11 PM
Erm guys, I;m putting this post here because it concerns the story, for some reason, my sims fingers have fused together and I don't know how to get rid of it, I know others have this problem and if anyone knows how to get rid of it, post it here so we will all know
18th Dec 2006, 11:05 PM
Chris and Diana walked out of the pizzaria, happily engaged and planning to be married, they were talking about what would happen in the future.
"I can't believe it Di, last year we had only just met, and now we're engaged, it's incredible, I'm so glad I met you" Chris said in ectasy, meeting Diana had made his whole life turn around, they were now inseperable.
"I know Chris, and I agree" Diana replied smiling, "So when is the wedding?" She asked.
"Erm... when did we say it was going to be?...erm" Chris paused for a moment, "Oh yes, next month, in June, the 21st" he concluded.
Diana and Chris drew eachother into a long, passionate kiss, they were young, free, engaged and all but unaware of the growing danger. They walked on. Chris was the first to notice what was going on, he stopped so suddenly that Diana nearly walked into him. "Whats wrong?" she asked. Chris didn't reply, he was staring wide eyed, and terrified at somewhere up the road. Diana followed her gaze and saw a car with something black sticking out the window.
It happened too quickly for Diana to react. All she saw was a man with that look in his eyes that said he was high on drugs, probably cocaine, and holding a machine gun. Thin, black, deadly. Then Chris pushed her to the wall away from the danger, and then she heard the terrifying noise of bullets colliding with bricks, and flesh.
Chris had managed to save Diana's life, but he couldn't react quickly enough to save his own, and Diana screamed as she heard the bullets hit him in the back. The love, the happiness, the life in Chris's eyes were wiped away in an instant. The last word she heard from him passed his lips, then he was torn from her life, forever.
"Someone, stop him!" Diana screamed, "Come back you *******! Come back!" She screamed at the car fading quickly from sight. He was gone.
Tears streamed from her eyes and the full shock of what had just happened hit her with such a force, that she couldn't understant why why she was still standing. Chris had saved her life, and sacrificed himself for her, he was gone forever. She didn't know what she was going to do.
The image of Chris's body seemed to grow larger in front of her eyes until it was all she could see, she closed her eyes tight to block the heartbreaking sight from her view, but she could still see him, the sight would would never leave her mind, it would haunt her forever...
Suddenly Diana woke up screaming, as she calmed down and came to her senses she could here Rosie barking like mad in terror and confusion. Of course, Diana thought sadly, it was another nightmare. There was sweat on her forehead, she was incredibly hot, so she got up and went outside to clear her head and cool down.
As she walked outside, she felt a gentle breeze ruffle her hair, she shivered as she gazed at the river mouth down below, someone, in this small village had murdered her boyfriend, her soulmate, and, whoever it was, was still on the loose, how could anyone be so cruel? she wondered.
An angry tear trickled down her face as she thought of whoever had murdered Chris, whoever it was, whoever had done it, was going to pay. Suddenly she realised how cold she was getting so she ambled inside and got back in bed, silently hating Chris's murderer. Who knew when that person would strike again?
18th Dec 2006, 11:09 PM
at last your wait is over, enjoy!
18th Dec 2006, 11:23 PM
Did you fix the fused fingers? It looks like it in the last few pics, but in case you didn't know... here is the solution. You have to fiddle with the graphics preformance options to get the sims fingers to behave normally again. It happened in my computer after I installed OFB, but I corrected the error after a few tries. :) Hope this helped!
19th Dec 2006, 02:34 AM
YAY update I love it wooo!
19th Dec 2006, 10:23 AM
psycosimmer, I did fix it, I forgotten to turn the sim/object detail up to high, erm by the way, do you know where the best place to get resident and community lots for free are? Sims community is good, but all the good lots you have to pay for
19th Dec 2006, 10:30 AM
thanks guys, erm I took this picture an I thought it was funny, so I'll post it here for you to enjoy
Someone's feeling sexy!!!
19th Dec 2006, 12:29 PM
Heehee, cute picture! Great update too, tis really sad!
20th Dec 2006, 12:59 AM
really cute picture glad to hear that you fixed it! UPDATE PLEASE! :D
20th Dec 2006, 05:03 AM
hahaha. nice update! (I'm not laughing at the update)
20th Dec 2006, 05:40 AM
OOOh its very good!! Cant wait to read more!!!
20th Dec 2006, 12:12 PM
yeah, all I need to do is think of what will happen next, probably she'll be seeing rellies for halloween. any idea wherre I can get get good halloween cossies 4 kiddies from?
20th Dec 2006, 05:25 PM
well I just downloaded a halloween pack, so all I need to do now is think of the next chapter
21st Dec 2006, 12:03 AM
halloween pack or holiday pack?
21st Dec 2006, 10:53 AM
halloween pack from sims fantastic
21st Dec 2006, 05:25 PM
You can get good smaller sized lots from MaryLou on MTS2, and there are tons of fabulous finished lots over there, too. Just to let ya know... btw, when's the next update? I simply MUST know!
22nd Dec 2006, 01:51 AM
I love this story! It's really sad though.
By the way, her facial expression is adorable. =]
22nd Dec 2006, 11:26 AM
I guess, it's kind of a lemony snicket story, isn't it, I'll get started on the next update now, thanks for the tips, and you know, I looked into Diana's face, in that picture up there and strangely enough I saw a permanent sadness, it's so wierd, she looked worried :S
23rd Dec 2006, 12:41 PM
I've got most of the pictures now, I just need to take a few more. her gardens supposed to look frosty but I reckon the rest of the neighborhood ruins the effect :(
24th Dec 2006, 04:27 PM
Ok Guys, here is my christmas present to you, chapter 3!
Recently, Diana had started flower arranging, she was working from home and selling them there at the moment, but she hoped to get her own shop one day. She walked down the steps and got to work, she hadn't put on her coat
It was a cold Haloween morning, the first frost of the year had settled down, but Diana wasn't really caring, she just concentrated on her work, but being it so cold, the work was slow and labourious, and soon her hands began to shake, they became stiff, and even picking up the flowers became hard. Stopping, Diana flapped her hands a bit to keep the fading feeling in them, and walked inside to get her coat and gloves.
As she got inside where it was warm, she noticed the phones repeated ringing, she went over to it and lifted the handset from the holder.
"Hello, who is this?" She said in the speaker.
"Who do you think?" A familiar voice replied.
Diana smiled, she knew that voice, but she decided to make a fake guess on who it was, "Are you jack frost, intending to freeze my home and trap me
inside?" She asked.
"No, no, don't be silly, it's your sister!" Diana's sister replied laughing. "But Obviously you knew that didn't you?"
Diana and her Twin Alice had loved to pretend to be someone else when they were talking on the phone, the joke had never died, it lived on. "Of course I did Alice, I'd know your voice anywhere" Diana replied. " So why are you calling then?" she asked.
Alice paused for a second "Diana, I was wondering, will you be over to come and see us today? At about 3? We haven't seen you in ages.
Diana thought about this for a second, she hadn't seen Alice in ages it was true, but her husband Sam gave a painful reminder about Chris, they were very alike, but she wasn't doing anything today so she decided to go.
"Ok then, you win, when do you want me to go back home?" She asked.
"Well I think 7:30 should be ok, hows that" Alice asked.
Diana checked her watch, it was 2:30, Alices house in Kingshire was 15 minutes away. "Pretty short notice, but I'll come, see you in half an hour".
"Ok, see you then, bye" Alice said and hung up the phone, then she walked outside, Iris, Ben, your Aunty Di is coming over in half an hour, so go get yourself dressed, and Iris, hows your painting going?" she asked her 11 year
"It's coming on, I'll finish it soon" Iris replied.
"Well thats certainly good, now come on get inside, your shaking" Alice said, gently ushering Iris inside. "you too, Ben"
"Ok, so Diana's coming today? since when?" Ben asked as he surfaces from his dive.
"Since I called her 5 minutes ago" Alice replied.
Ben nodded as if he understood, "Ok" then pausing slightly he put on a cheeky grin and asked, "mummy, what am I getting for my birthday?"
Alice looked oin mock exasperation at her husband. Ben was going to be 13 on the 11th of November, and wouldn't stop badgering them about it.
"you'll see" she replied and walked inside.
15 minutes later, Diana put her coat and gloves on, and got into her car.
A few minutes after that, she started her car and drove of into the distance of Red Willowby, heading for Kingshire.
24th Dec 2006, 04:32 PM
chapter 3 will be posted after new years day
24th Dec 2006, 06:23 PM
Lovely update! I'll be watching in eager anticipation for your update!
24th Dec 2006, 11:14 PM
I really like this story!In fact.....I LOVE it!Just keep on updating!
25th Dec 2006, 02:57 PM
seriously Irine, you are so sweer! Merry christmas everyone!
Sweer? did I say that? I meant sweet, heh heh he.... uhhhhhh...
25th Dec 2006, 06:39 PM
Looking forward to getting to know Alice and her family better. Nice update.
Merry Christmas to you too!
26th Dec 2006, 01:51 PM
Nice update, Iris and Ben seem sweet. Keep it up, and merry Christmas!
26th Dec 2006, 08:29 PM
merry boxing day you mean! :P
27th Dec 2006, 07:41 PM
Diana smiled to herself as she walked up to the door of her sisters house, she had always loved the decorations they put up, her favourite ones were the gravestones, she knew why Alice put these decorations up each year, it was to amuse Iris and Ben, and she knew they loved the stuff put up. Speaking of Iris, it seemed she had noticed Diana, because she was grinning and pointing at her excitedly.
Alice walked up to the door to greet her twin, they were alike in every possible way, and they had to wear different clothes so people could tell them apart. Diana smiled, " Hi Alice " She said.
"Good to see you, sister. I'm really sorry about Chris, but just remember the good times you had, and you'll feel better about it, I promise" Alice said.
Diana smiled sadly, " well that’s a promise I can trust" she said, "Everyone else just tries not to mention it, so thanks".
Alice nodded, "Come on, you must be freezing, come inside before you catch a chill" she said. Then they embraced and for one moment, Diana felt something she hadn't felt for 5 months, she felt safe.
They walked inside and Diana took her coat off, as they warmed up, they started talking, and Diana felt as if the 5 months had never happened. She was warm, she felt safe, she had travelled out of the danger in the outside world and had settled quite happily in her heart, where she could forget about her inner pain, where she could free herself, just for a while and be truly happy, just for a while.
"So where are Iris and Ben? Are they over at a friends?" Diana asked after a while.
Alice simply shrugged" I don't know, guess so, as I haven't seen them you got here...." Alice's voice tailed off slightly, having run out of words. Diana noticed that Iris was standing just behind Alice, but Iris shook her head and brought a finger to her lips. Diana got the message ' Keep it a surprise for her ' Diana nodded, but made it look like she was nodding to what Alice had said, and said nothing herself, while Iris ran off in silence.
"No, they're getting changed honey, you'll see them once they've got into their halloween costumes, they're going trick or treating tonight" Sam said, and Diana jumped, she hadn't noticed him there, but she quickly relaxed, Sam could have that effect on her.
"Ok then, I hope they're not too long" Alice noted
Iris turned up about 5 minutes later, in a short witches dress, and a gorgeous mask. Iris wasted no time in greet her, "Diana!" She cried and leapt on top of her. Diana laughed, out of pure shock and how funny Iris had looked.
"Hey Iris, it's nice to see you again, I love your mask, and where's ben, by the way?" Diana asked, slightly winded from having the breath knocked out of her.
Ben walked into the room a few moments later, dressed quite obviously as one of those ninja turtles, she couldn't remember which.
"Hi Diana, nice to see you, me and Iris were just about to get going, and don't worry, I know a few tricks for this sort of thing, c'mon Iris" He said and walked out of the door.
Iris waved a hasty goodbye then ran out to follow her brother. But Diana couldn't help feeling worried, they were so young, so innocent, she was quite right to feel concerned. Alice looked like she was feeling the same.
After an hour or so, she and Alice heard the tell-tale clap that signaled the start of a thunderstorm. inwardly, Diana shivered, she had never liked thunderstorms and this was no different. She looked at Alice, who was looking fairly terrified. She was scared of thunderstorms and her concern for her childrens saftey was obviously making it worse. Diana placed a hand on her sisters shoulder, and Alice looked at her, the fear was still there but she looked comforted and smiled.
Quite suddenly they both heard a lot of commotion outside and they turned to each other. "What was that?" asked Alice.
"I don't know, probably thunder." Diana replied.
Suddenly the door banged open, their heads swiveled to face the door frame and Diana gasped bringing her hand to her mouth, Alice screamed.
Because there, framed breifly in the doorway, as white as a ghost, illuminated by a flash of lighthning, stood Iris, and in one glance Diana understood that something had happened, and it didn't look good.
27th Dec 2006, 08:36 PM
ohmigosh! great update!
27th Dec 2006, 09:05 PM
thanks! there are some things I need to sort out at the moment... rain downloads, new year, maybe some new clothes, and perhaps a new story! no wait, that probably won't happen 'till I'm cllose to finishing this
29th Dec 2006, 12:09 PM
ooh scary :P
30th Dec 2006, 10:10 AM
don't worry though, Iris will be fine
30th Dec 2006, 05:01 PM
She'd better be fine! Another great update... poor Iris, poor Alice...
31st Dec 2006, 05:21 PM
yeah, tell me about it, no update for at least a week though, because a few days ago my computer screen went bust and we had to order a new one and it won't come for a week. Sorry
31st Dec 2006, 07:52 PM
LOL! I guess you can...looking forward to more. I hope both the children are all right.
1st Jan 2007, 12:04 AM
finally, someones giving a thought about ben! No update for a week at least :(
1st Jan 2007, 11:01 PM
I'm loving this story!! Can't wait to see what happens next!!!
1st Jan 2007, 11:14 PM
I like updates. =)
2nd Jan 2007, 04:27 PM
:lol: great hint ldw, I can't update for a week at the least, I'm still waiting for my new screen
2nd Jan 2007, 08:18 PM
Awww. Okie dokie.
8th Jan 2007, 06:36 PM
Good news everyone! I got my new screen, update part 2 is gonna come up very soon, and I am goona design the tile pic for my newest story rippling water, which will start when I finish designing the neighborhood
13th Jan 2007, 10:58 AM
I'm goona start takin pics.... now!
13th Jan 2007, 06:20 PM
Can't wait! :D
13th Jan 2007, 10:15 PM
ok I've got all the pics, so I'll start writing now, and if the need arises, I'll finish it tomorrow
13th Jan 2007, 10:17 PM
14th Jan 2007, 03:58 PM
Diana couldn't believe it, why did the night have to be ruined? They’d been having such a nice time, and now this had ruined it all.
Diana fidgeted slightly, she hoped that there wasn't any underlying injuries, she hoped Iris would be ok. Alice seemed to think the same.
"I-Iris?" Alice stammered. Iris looked at her for a second, and you see the terror and pain outlined in her face, something terrible must have happened, Diana could tell that, or Iris wouldn't be looking so scared.
"Mum!" Iris cried, and ran into her mothers arms. Alice hugged her daughter so tightly; it was like she was terrified that if she let Iris go, she'd vanish. "Mum, I'm so sorry, the-there was a man, he... he..."
"Shhh, it's ok Iris, you don't have to tell us now..." Alice interrupted gently, trying to soothe her sobbing daughter, but Iris cut across her.
"No! I have to tell you now! the man, he had a knife, he grabbed me and tried to drag me into a-a bush, I struggled, and that’s when he hit me and slashed me, Ben got really angry at that and tried to get him off me, and the man threw me onto the ground and I ran in here to get you" Iris sobbed.
Suddenly a door banged open and Diana looked up. "I heard screaming" he said in a rush, "Is everyone alright?" he asked. Then he saw Iris and the state she was in. The colour drained from his face. He looked at his wife, "What happened to her? Where’s Ben?" he asked shakily. Alice motioned him to the kitchen, in seconds, Diana and Iris were alone. "Why... why did he do it Di? What did we do to him?" Iris asked quietly, looking at the floor.
Diana didn't know what to say "I... well... I think he wasn't... he wasn't in his right mind, people can be like that, and I should know" Diana said anxiously.
Suddenly they noticed Alice and Sam had to returned into the room. Alice shivered "I can't believe someone did this to our kids Sam" she said, then she looked at Iris, "Iris, I... I think you should go to bed and get some rest, you've had a tough night, I'm sorry your halloween was ruined" she said quietly.
Iris nodded and started to make for the stairs.
But Diana stopped her, " What about Ben, is Ben Ok?" She asked quietly.
What happened next answered her question. They heard a boy scream and there was a loud bang. Diana went cold inside. Alice burst into tears.
"I... think... I think we've just found out" Sam said shakily.
They all rushed outside, the man who had attacked her sisters children was nowhere to be seen, but she thought she could see a man in a red bandanna, running off into the distance. When she saw where Ben was, she called Alice and Sam over. When Alice saw her son face down on the ground she buried her face into Sam's shoulder. Diana bent down and felt for his wrist, there was a pulse, he was still alive, just unconcious. But he was injured, and badly. Near Ben's shoulder the grass was going crimson red. She stood up and looked at Sam. " Call an Ambulance" She said.
14th Jan 2007, 06:17 PM
Nooooo! Aw, that's too sad! I hope Ben's okay, I really do.
14th Jan 2007, 09:27 PM
No! Poor Ben!! Thats so sad! =(
14th Jan 2007, 10:24 PM
SO sad.... *sniffle*
Well written, though... Looking forward to another update...
14th Jan 2007, 10:59 PM
that was fast, I'll get the next chapter up ASAP
14th Jan 2007, 11:20 PM
Your evil! *sobs*
Please make Ben be all right.
I'll be eagerly awaiting your update!
EDIT: LOL! (to below)
Yes, evil. ;)
15th Jan 2007, 04:48 PM
I'm evil? I'm trying to think what the next chapter will be called, oh wait... :D
16th Jan 2007, 10:55 PM
Ok guys, just a little notice, this has some Nudity in the last pic but I have tried to show as little of the er... body as possible. 4 blue lampshades helped me with this, but if you find the last pic offensive just say the word and I will delete the that last picture, pronto!
"What do you mean there's no need to call an ambulance?" Diana asked, surprised. "Ben is really badly injured, he was shot in the shoulder, Sam!" she said.
"I mean," said Sam, "that I know what's wrong with him, and I know what to do" he told Diana.
"So what," Diana paused "Is wrong with him?" she asked. Diana was so confused, but the look on Sam's face gave her an uneasy feeling. "It's nothing too serious is it?" she asked again.
"Diana..." Sam looked grave, " Ben is in a coma" he said grimly.
"Are you sure?" Diana asked him, he nodded then Diana asked, "How do you know? He looks unconcious to me"
"you do remember that I work at the local hospital, I've had to take care of patients like this, of course I'd recognise it" he said.
Diana bit her lip, "What should we do?" she asked.
Sam thought for a second, "I have an oxygen mask and insulin drip in case of emergencys, how long have I had them, Alice?" He asked.
"About a month" Alice replied.
"ok, Diana, would you go and carry Ben to his Bed? Then could you get the Drip and Oxygen mask from the cupboard, you stick the drip needle in Bens left arm, I need some time alone with Alice" he said, Diana nodded, picked up Ben, and left the room to carry him upstairs.
"Sam what are we going to do? we don't have the right eqipment for a comatose" Alice said.
Sam gently hugged her wife, "Don't worry love, the insulin and Oxygen will keep Ben going for 2 days at the least, we'll get him to a hospital tomorrow" he said.
Alice smiled and whispered, "I don't know what I'd ever do without you" Sam hushed her, then they kissed, Sam and Alice had these moments often, when they were alone, but it usually wasn't in the living room. Then they unconciously found themselves going down...
16th Jan 2007, 10:59 PM
just remember, if you find the last pic offensive, just tell me :D rate high!
17th Jan 2007, 07:38 AM
does anyone know where to get a sim life-support machine? or should I get the hibernator
17th Jan 2007, 10:23 AM
Aw, I hope poor Ben gets better... :( I like the last picture, it's very tasteful! Don't worry about it! :D Nice update.
17th Jan 2007, 06:51 PM
how is it? tasteful, I mean, I was worried it might detract from the story
17th Jan 2007, 07:58 PM
Nah, I don't think it does. It's tasteful in that you've covered, um, everything that needs covering, and it's at a really nice angle too. It's a nice picture... I'm fine with it. :)
17th Jan 2007, 10:43 PM
well, that clears my worrys :)
19th Jan 2007, 01:52 PM
what, does no-one else like this update? was it too boring?
19th Jan 2007, 01:58 PM
I like this story very much! Hope Ben gets better too...
19th Jan 2007, 08:54 PM
we'll see, I think I'll turn evil again and leave it a week to torture you :lol:
20th Jan 2007, 06:32 PM
well, I have decided the name of the next chapter but you'll find out later, but hey at least that means that the next chap is coming up
28th Jan 2007, 07:34 PM
I'll start updating tomorrow after school
30th Jan 2007, 08:29 PM
Aw, sweet story! So sad though!
31st Jan 2007, 07:37 AM
"Diana, do you think I'll ever see him awake again?" Alices anxious voice crackled through the speaker.
"Alice, it's only been a week, give him time" Diana replied, a week had passed since Ben had fallen into coma and the brittle weather of November had settled in like a curse. Alice had taken Iris to the bonfire at the local park the night before. Alice had said she enjoyed it, but it just wasn't the same.
"But..." Alice began to say, but Diana cut her off.
"Hey, will it make you feel better if I go check on him, the hospital's on the way to the petshop, I'm getting Rosie a friend" Diana asked.
There was a slight pause and Diana heard Alice's breath crackling out of the reciever like static, "Yes" She said quietly and hung up.
Diana sighed and placed the phone back in it's holder. Then she walked into Rosies room to refill her feed bowl. She turned around and saw Rosie acting genuinely puppyish, even though she was an adult. She bent down and rubbed Rosie's belly. "Someones going to get a new friend today" She said, before getting up and walking into her backgarden.
As she watered the flowers that surround the grave of the man who had been torn so unfairly from her life, she felt her willpower to go on drain from her body, sagging her shoulders, shutting her eyes. Her knees gave way and she sank to the ground her shoulders shaking as her body was racked with muffled tears. "lord, help me" she whispered as the world went dark around her and the soft grass brushed her cheek as her face touched the ground which felt as soft as feathers.
She looked up and saw a man she knew, yet who could not possibly be here. He stroked her face, smiling softly. "you will find the truth, for better or worse" he whispered in her ear. Diana opened her mouth to say something, but before the words could come out his lips met her own.
She heard a voice in her head, as light as the wind 'Wake up Diana'
Diana sat up blinking in the sunlight. She was lying in the flowers around chris's grave, and her head hurt, all she could remember went up to walking up to the gravestone, nothing more. Slowly getting up, she looked thoughtfully up at the sky as a breeze ruffled the treetops. She didn't know why, but she whispered a heartfelt, 'thank you ' to the air, and got into her car.
Diana gazed sadly at the still being strapped to the life-support machine, the machines here looked like normal, canopied beds, how they worked was a secret, only the owner of the hospital knew what it was, no-one else.
"your mother's really scared for you right now Ben, she's scared she might never see you awake again, I know that it seems pointless talking to you when you're in this state, for all the responce I'll get, but I know you can hear me," Diana sighed, "I wish I knew if there was a way to wake you up, but that wound on your shoulder is healing up very nicely, oh and by the way, you remember that girl you have a crush on? She's coming over later, just thought you might want to know" Diana sighed again and got up, " I have to go now, please get well soon" She said, and walked out the room.
When she arrived at the pet shop, se walked over to the owner.
"Hello, may I help you?" He asked politely.
"Um yes, I came here to buy a dog" She said calmly.
"We have lots of dogs here, any particular breed?" He asked, just as politely.
"Do you have any spaniels? I have a soft spot for them" Diana asked.
"Yes we do, follow me" he replied and walked off, Diana followed.
After some thought she chose a young male called Jay-Jay, he had a black coat with brown splotches on his back. Diana bent down to stroke his head and he shied away, obviously a bit nervous, but then settled down and let her
"Thank you sir, he's gorgeous!" Diana exclaimed happily.
"Ok, and that will be £400 please" The shopkeeper said.
Diana handed over the money and walked out of the shop with a spring in her step, Jay-Jay following up behind.
31st Jan 2007, 07:41 AM
Btw Jayjay is NOT a spaniel, I just can't remember what he is
31st Jan 2007, 09:16 AM
Aw, Jay-Jay's so cute! It's so sad about Ben though, I really hope he gets better...
31st Jan 2007, 06:49 PM
2nd Feb 2007, 04:55 PM
why did only loco reply to this? Is it getting too boring? Please be honest...
2nd Feb 2007, 05:08 PM
Jenny, Don't worry, it's a great story, But hardly anyone really comments on storys anymore. Personally I'm a silent reader and have been following this from the start! I just don't post, as the only things I'd be able to say are "Brilliant, I love it!" Or "Cmon, update it soon please!" :D
2nd Feb 2007, 06:55 PM
:lol: it's better than nothing!
4th Feb 2007, 01:46 AM
I'm enjoying your story. Can't wait for another update!
4th Feb 2007, 04:06 AM
I didn't reply until now because I don't check for updates too often & haven't subscribed to all the stories I'm reading, but I liked the update, though I didn't know it was here until just now.
Your pictures are very lovely, btw. :)
4th Feb 2007, 05:33 PM
Jay-Jay is REEEEEAAAALLY cute!By the way, I have the same problem on my story too....I can understand you....
4th Feb 2007, 10:58 PM
I think I know why no-one replied to my sisters story now, she thought no-one liked it so she deleted it. I might try and update over the next week, but most likely it'll be the week after that, as I have a week off. I'm glad I've got you guys gripped, the next chapter will be from a different view that diana's, by the way... and it's gonna be a person we haven't yet met... feel free to guess!
4th Feb 2007, 11:04 PM
5th Feb 2007, 10:40 PM
Well, I will try and get started tomorrow, I hope my story is original and I'll try to keep all the chapters interesting, that means lots of cliffs to hang from!
6th Feb 2007, 12:01 AM
I just got caught up. :)
Sometimes work and RL keeps me from commenting on the stories I like.
(Not to mention barely any free time to update my story.)
However; I wanted to let you know that I'm still reading and enjoying your story. (Love JayJay and the chance to see George the shopboy. :lovestruc )
You still got me hanging on the cliff!
6th Feb 2007, 12:56 AM
This is a really nice story you've got here Jenny. :)
Try not to get discouraged if you don't get as many comments, there are many silent readers out there. Just do it for yourself! It's lots of fun :D
6th Feb 2007, 07:33 AM
montridge, george is an NPC by the way
6th Feb 2007, 10:43 PM
Awwwww, anything with a dog of some kind gets a "yay!" from me!
6th Feb 2007, 10:48 PM
George didn't stay an NPC long in my game. :)
He's a college student and dating my criminal mastermind's daughter.
7th Feb 2007, 07:07 AM
thanks all! you're so sweet
7th Feb 2007, 05:50 PM
The weather is saying theres gonna be 10cm of snow tomorrow round where I am, that'll be more than what my dad has in italy, and he's gone skiing!
7th Feb 2007, 09:35 PM
Sorry if this is commercial but I recently started this forum for my website, lilac sims 2.
I'll put ther link on my sig soon but I'll place the link here too if thats ok
Lilac Sims 2 Modelling Agency (http://www.phpbbserver.com/lilacsimsforums/index.php?mforum=lilacsimsforums)
it would be nice if some of you guys joined :D
10th Feb 2007, 08:27 PM
it's good to se some of you aren't impatient :P
12th Feb 2007, 11:08 AM
hey what do you think of my new avvie? I might make a page where I put avatars and backgrounds on my website, what do you think?
13th Feb 2007, 05:29 PM
Anne was watering the plants in her garden, and she started to think about what she was going to do if her secret got out, what would she do if that man threatening her decided to hire her as an assasin, as she was capable of killing, but she only did so when necessary, and killing people he told her to kill was definately not necessary at all, it was cruel and wrong, if he hired her to kill for money, she would have to refuse, but then he would obviously tell everyone what she was and tell a twisted lie saying she was evil and would kill anyone she came across. No, she would have to tell everyone herself, and she would tell the truth. But when?
Suddenly she felt a presence near her and got up. She saw a young woman standing in front of her. "May I help you?" She asked.
The woman paused for a second then replied, " yes, are you Anne Stockholm?" she asked.
Anne nodded and replied "yeah, that's me. Not to be rude, but who are you?" she asked.
The woman looked surprised at this question, " I'm Alice Frabate, Miss Stockholm. Ben's Mother?" Alice replied.
"Oh, you've come to see Ben? Ok, and it's nice to meet you Alice, you can call me Anne. I was never into those formal plesantries" Anne said grinning.
"So how is he then?" Alice asked anxiously, "Sam told me last night that Ben had been moved to home care here"
Anne smiled reassuringly " Alice don't worry, Ben is absolutley fine, I'm taking good care of him" She said.
"As fine as he can be without waking up or even moving" Alice muttered.
Anne laughed slightly, " Hey Alice, he's still trying, still fighting, so don't be like that" She said.
Alice looked funny, " how would you know that?" she asked suspiciously.
Anne gave her an intense look, "because I can feel it" She said, but Anne couldn't just feel it, she could sense it. If Anne sensed that Ben was giving up, she would have to take to thte last resort, and she wouldn't do that without permission from Ben's parents.
"Hey Alice, would... would you like to see him?" Anne asked.
"Sure, that is the reason I came anyway" Alice replied.
Anne grinned, showing two, slightly pointed incisors, "I know" she said.
Alice look sheepish, " was it that obvious?" she asked.
Anne nodded, "yeah, hold on, I'll just let you in" she said, and with that, she walked inside. Alice stayed still for a moment, letting a single tear make it's way down her cheek. Alice shook her head violently and wiped the tear off her cheek. Then she walked up to Anne's front door and waited to be let in.
When Anne opened her front door, she said nothing, and indicated for Alice to follow her. Anne lead her into a room where there was a white metal container inside.
"So that's him, inside I mean" Alice said in a monotone.
"Alice, don't be like that, the damage caused by the gunshot wound is healing up fast, I told you, he's still fighting" Anne said in a slightly pleading voice, "Don't give up on him"
Alice's voice cracked as she spoke, "I know, I know, but... but it's hard" She whispered.
Anne placed a hand on her arm, " I know what you mean, I've seen it." She said, then her eyes brightened slightly, "Hey do you want something to eat? I was about to make lunch anyway, Gammon sandwiches, in case you wanted to know" Anne said.
"Thanks, Anne" Alice said without looking up.
"Ok" Anne said softly, "I'll leave you two alone" she said and left the room.
As the door closed Alice sighed heavily and placed a hand on the cold glass window and loooked at her son's closed eyes, willing them to open, but nothing happened. Alice felt her eyes prickle, "Oh Ben, Where are you?" She asked hopelessly.
Meanwhile, Anne had nearly finished making the sandwiches when a sudden noise made her whirl around.
13th Feb 2007, 06:02 PM
Well how was that? Huh?
13th Feb 2007, 08:34 PM
*sigh* too many silent readers :( speak up people and post!
13th Feb 2007, 08:38 PM
hey, was wondering, should I do lot's of cliffs, or not so lot's?
15th Feb 2007, 05:49 AM
Don't worry hon, this is a pretty good story! Lots of people just don't comment very much. I like it though, especially this one line in chapter 5 I think it was, about autumn setting in like a curse? It was great! Your pics are very good, even though you may need to watch the grid lines. Although I haven't seen them since about ch. 3, so maybe I don't need to mention it...anyways this is very good, don't let the lack of comments get you down!
15th Feb 2007, 08:08 AM
Hmmm....that Anne is a mysterious one...I wonder what will happen next!
15th Feb 2007, 09:28 AM
Julieth: Sorry about the grid lines, I sometimes take the pictures in buy mode and forget about the lines (silly me) and I'm glad that some particular lines really catch your attention. I'll try and update soon. :D
Plumeria: You'll find out more about Anne in the chapters to come, but the title picture should give you an idea about her. By the way I'm luvin your story!
15th Feb 2007, 01:23 PM
Anne heard Alice calling her name repeatedly, and imediatley went alert. There were loads of reasons why Alice would be calling her. Was something wrong? Was Ben in trouble? She didn't know.
Anne put down the piece of bread she'd been buttering and ran as fast as she could without her feet leaving the ground into the room where Anne stood and Ben lay.
"What is it? What happened?" Anne asked in a rush, but seeing Alice's face, the tension in her heart started to wain.
"Anne, he moved his hand, he moved his hand!" she spluttered excitedly, "Is he waking up?" she asked.
Anne paused, biting her lip slightly, then she walked over to the life support machine and checked the readings.
"Well?" Alice asked, the fire of hope in her eyes was begining to fade.
"Alice I..." Anne paused, she hated crushing people's hopes, she had done it before when the darkness in her heart had overwhelmed her, she had promised mercy, the people she had hurt hoped they would be ok, but Anne had killed them. At the time she rejoiced in their despair, she found killing fun. But those times were far away now, weren't they? Anne then realised she had to be honest, "I checked the readings, there was a responce from him, but not enough to be waking up" Anne said.
The hope in Alices eyes switched off like a light that had blown it's bulb, "So... so it didn't mean anything then..." Alice said, looking down.
"Alice look at me" Anne said quietly, Alice did so, moving her head up until their gazes were locked, "it might have just been a nerve twitching, it COULD have mean't nothing but, it could also mean he's beginning to respond, that he'll be waking up soon, do you get me?" Ane said, looking at Alice intently.
Alice paused slightly, then she said quietly "yes, I understand" but the hope in her eyes had rekindled, there was a tiny spark in her eyes.
Alice looked down, slightly embarrassed. "Sorry Anne, I..." She gulped, "I guess I was just being stupid, I should've known" She muttered hopelessly.
Anne, who had been gazing at Ben, turned her head at the sound, looking at Alice.
"Oh honey," Anne said, hugging her, " you couldn't of known, I've seen that reaction before, it's perfectly normal" she said into Alice's hair.
Anne stayed still, letting Anne hug her, it was unexpected yet... comforting, at least she wasn't alone.
When Anne released her, Alice said nervously, "Anne, I have to go, I need to pick Iris up from school" She walked out.
Anne was surprised, but it was 3:00 after all, she ran out the room and stopped Alice, "you wait right there, I'll be right back, " Anne said and walked into the kitchen.
Twenty seconds later, Anne returned, holding a plate. "here, you must be hungry" she said, holding the sandwich to her.
Anne paused, then took the sandwich. Taking a bite out of it she said, " it's good, I'll finish it later" Alice grinned.
"Right now though, " she said, "I have to go, see you"
"Bye Alice, hope I see you soon" Anne said, waving.
Alice nodded and left, closing the door with a snap.
Anne sighed and sat down, switching on the the telly to see what was on, but there was nothing interesting, not really. Just a few missing people and a car accident.
Then she heard the phone ringing.
Anne was curious and apprehensive as she picked up the phone from it's holder, "Yeah? who is it?" she spoke into the reciever.
Her voice remained calm and her face remained Empty, but inside her heart was churning with fear and darkness and dread as she heard the reply.
Because she knew that voice, and she wished she didn't.
15th Feb 2007, 05:42 PM
grr right now I'm trying to think of chapter 7, instead I get chapter 8 and 9, yikes!
16th Feb 2007, 10:30 AM
Oooh... a vampire? Intriguing. I look forward to the next installment, whatever you come up with for it. :D
I'd like to help, but wouldn't know where to begin. :)
16th Feb 2007, 10:38 AM
you got it kristal, ever seen angel?
how did you work it out?
it's cool really as anne can change into a vampire at will
and I've thought of the next chapter
16th Feb 2007, 11:49 AM
Anne is an insanely cool character, I really like her. Great update! :D It's really interesting to see how this story moves around and changes focus, it keeps it interesting. Looking forward to the next chapter!
16th Feb 2007, 03:33 PM
well that's good news, all I'm saying is that the focus will move back to diana, and we'll see someone new. THAT'S ALL I'M GIVING AWAY
16th Feb 2007, 05:23 PM
Eh... I have vampire radar. I can spot one from yards away. :p
16th Feb 2007, 06:16 PM
really... my guess is you noticed the title page and the skin :P
18th Feb 2007, 10:44 AM
Gosh, I don't know where to start.
I was thinking at first 'I want to read about Diana', but as the introduction to Anne unfolded, I was really intriqued.
Here we have a character that sounds like she has a dark past, now she has so much compassion. How did she get from bad to actually working to help people? Who's the guy on the phone? So many questions to keep me reading.
I did wonder how she was out and about during the day or if she was even a vampire, but happily I know now. :D
I often admire some of the original ways you describe things too.
Anyway, I love your characters and can't wait to see where you take us. :)
18th Feb 2007, 01:02 PM
she can walk in the sun, because she can change from vampire to human at will, you'll meet someone new in the next chapter, and you find out more of anne's past in 8 and 9, I'm glad you like my story, Anne plays a certain part later on in the story, and so does the man on the phone, I'm just giving a go at linking them all together
20th Feb 2007, 01:33 PM
Nice story Jenny! You mentioned how yours wasn't as active as Iris's in her story so I thought I would check it out. I'm loving it so far.
I noticed Anne was a vampire because you said slightly pointed canines or something like that. Then I noticed she was very pale. Then you mentioned the picture.
Keep up the good work :D
20th Feb 2007, 05:04 PM
thanks, I've started taking the pictures for the 7th chapter, so it will be coming up soon
22nd Feb 2007, 11:00 PM
Sorry I'm taking so long to update, it's just that my sister need my computer for the sims 2 now as well!
23rd Feb 2007, 04:32 PM
really... my guess is you noticed the title page and the skin :P
Well... that too. ;)
7th Mar 2007, 07:28 AM
sorry I havn't updated in so long, but with school work burying me alive, it isn't easy, I try to save the sims for the weekend but I might be able to get onto it tonight, but I have some of the pictures, and I would maybe be able to put part 1 up tonighth, what do you think?
7th Mar 2007, 09:51 AM
It's up to you, really - don't rush to get it to us! If you can, that'd be cool, though. :) Good luck with your work and stuff, that really sucks...
7th Mar 2007, 06:27 PM
Take your time. We can wait. Well maybe... :D I need an update!
7th Mar 2007, 06:55 PM
hmm, I'm just saying, should I use the pics I have already and put in part 1, or go on the sms and finish the whole chapter? I'll probably go with option 2
8th Mar 2007, 09:11 AM
Yeah, go for it (option 2, I mean). We don't mind waiting, and I'm sure it'll be worth it!
10th Mar 2007, 12:13 PM
I've got all the pictures nw and I'm just photoshopping them now, update this evening hopefully
23rd Mar 2007, 04:40 PM
gahh, finally finished it! coming up in a few minutes...
23rd Mar 2007, 04:43 PM
Diana walked out of the bathroom to find Alice playing on the gamestation. "Alice, we're supposed to go out partying tonight, shouldn't we be getting ready?" She asked in exaperation.
Alice paused the game she was playing and stood up, "I know, but you said we were leaving at 7:00, it's only 5:00" Alice grinned "we've plenty of time"
"Getting ready can take a while, knowing you" Diana pointed out, a mischievous smile playing about her lips.
Alice gaped at Diana, "what?! there was absolutley no call for that, you take just as long!" she exclaimed. Then she saw the joking look on Diana's face and calmed down,
"Ok, I'll get ready after you play a multiplayer race with me, is that ok?" she asked with trademark puppy eyes.
Diana laughed raising her eyebrows slightly, "is it... need for speed your playing?" She asked curiously.
Alice nodded in answer.
"Well alright then" Diana replied, sitting down, "but just one, then we sort ourselves out for clubbing, ok?"
Alice nodded, "ok, lets do that really long one" Alice said.
Diana laughed, "ooh, I love that one!" she cried.
Alice smiled at Diana's response, "great minds think alike" she commented as she sat down.
Alice set the track to the longest one, then she and Diana chose their cars. Alice chose an orange lamborgini, much to
Diana's distaste. "it reminds me of vomit" she said. Diana herself, chose the Aston Martin DB9, silver, with a golden flame running along the
When the race started, Diana managed to keep a just-in-the-lead position for several miles, but after a while, she noticed
that Alice was beginning to take ahead and was moving further and further away. Nitrious, damn it, she thought.
"Woo, oh yeah! Diana you fool, you'll never catch me now, ha ha!" Alice cried out in mock.
Diana concentrated on keeping Alilces car in her sights, "We'll see" she murmered.
As the end drew near, Diana began to catch up. She waited, biding her time, waiting for the right moment,
and then she pushed in the nitrous and gunned it, rushing past Alice and past the finish in victorious triumph.
"Yes!" Diana breathed, she turned towards her sister, "What wa s that you were saying about me never being able to catch
you?" She asked.
"Well... um... I..." Alice seemed lost for words, it was obvious that she couldn't believe she'd lost.
"Ahh, never mind, sis" Diana said, clapping Alice on the back, "Come on, get your but in the bathroom" She said.
"Ok Diana, you know best" Alice replied submissibly, getting up and moving towards the bathroom.
"Yes, you're right there, " Diana replied, grinning, "I do know best" Then she got up and followed Alice, but moved into
Diana opened her drawers and rifled through the clothes she had, it took a while to choose the perfect outfit. Taking out the top and trousers she
slipped into them, struggling a bit with the button on her jeans but she managed it in the end. Just as she was pulling her
black boots on, she heard a knock at the door, Diana stiffined, an unannounced knock on an opaque door always tensed
her bones, you never knew who could be behind the wood, but she relaxed when she heard Alices familiar voice outside,
"Het Diana, you Decent?" Alice asked.
"Yeah, I'm done, you can come in" Diana replied and with rattling noise, the door opened.
As Alice entered the room, Diana noticed that the hairstyle Alice had used had given her a very cute look, making her look younger
that she actually was.
"Wow Diana, you look great!" Alice exclaimed.
"Thanks Alice, I love your hair" Diana replied.
Diana paused slightly, thinking hard. "I... guess we should swap now, I'll go in the bathroom and sort my hair out,
you get changed" She said, walking out.
Diana paused in front of the bathroom mirror, mentally planning what she would do with her hair and make-up, after turning to get the
right stuff, got to work.
It took a while to get it all done, and Diana struglled with the last hair slide, but it was worth it. Diana struck a pose in the mirror,
mentaly evaluating her hard work, grinned, and walked out to find Alice.
23rd Mar 2007, 04:45 PM
Diana knocked on the bedroom door, "Alice, are you done yet?" She called out, but there as no answer.
"Well, you took your time" said a voice behind her, making her jump and swing round in shock. "Alice!" Diana gasped, "Don't
do that again, you frightened the life out of me!"
Alice looked Slightly anxious, "Om my gosh, sorry, are you ok?" she asked.
"Yeah, I'm fine, you just... surprised me" Diana whispered, " I love the outfit you chose" She said, "Was the top from Debenhams?"
Alice nodded, "yeah, it was from Julian mc eeths line, got in a great deal.By the way, I love how your hair and makeup gives
you that really... really sweet anime look." Alice commented.
"really? I look like a sweet anime hore?" Diana asked, surprised.
Alice was shocked, "no! I'm talking about the sort of anime you see in pokemon and sailor moon! not all anime is assosiated with
the stuff perverted people do for fun and what lovers do in bed! Anyway, should we not get going?" Alice asked.
"you're right, we should go" Diana sighed.
"Come on then you, move it" Alice said, playfuly pushing her sister.
So the two girls walked over to Diana's car, and drove into the ever... so... slowly... darkening skyline, but Diana thought
she saw a small spark at the corner of her eye and turned her head to look at it closer, but saw only her sister... just... her sister.
Even before they arrived, Diana could feel the difined beat of the music,vibrating through to the very center of
her being, it seemed as though her heart were beating in unison, she put her hand on her forehead, she felt very lightheaded,
but didn't know why. For some reason, her ears were picking up a faint, almost inaudible, gently throbbing, pure note.
So... so... pure.
What was it?
Something was moving in the darkness of her mind.
An incredible fire had ignited in her heart...
Diana got out of the car with Alice but stopped her suddenly, "Alice, what do they have at this club?" she asked.
Alice paused, "Um... a bar, a dance sphere, a dance floor, toilets and hot tubs on the roof" she replied.
"Ok, cool, I was feeling thirsty anyway, I'll have a drink, then loosen up" Diana said.
Alice looked surprised, "right, but after you've had your drink, could you meet me by the dance sphere? It's a popular part,
and there will most likely be a queue" Alice said pleadingly.
"Ok then Diana, see you in a bit" Alice said and rushed inside.
Diana paused, then followed her.
As she walked in she saw the bar and moved over to it, the instant she sat down the barman said, "Evening ma'am. what'll
be your order?"
"Um..." Diana faltered glancing at thhe menu,
"Hey" said a voice.
Diana started and turned her head, "Yes?"
Her eyes widened with shock, she only just noticed a harmonious melody tinkling in her ears.
She knew now...
Here sat a stranger, whom she had never met before, but there was something in him reaching out to her.
"Try the coconut whisper, it's the best one here" the stranger said.
"Right, ok, I'll have the coconut whisper please" Diana said to the barman.
"Make that two, it's on me" the stranger interupted.
"Okey dokey, two Coconut Whispers coming up" replied the barman, sweeping off.
"Thanks" mumbled Diana.
"Don't mention it, the name's Jack, by the way" Jack said.
The barman returned with their drinks, "that'll be £5.00, sir" he said.
As they drank their drinks, they slowly got to know each other, and swapped e-mail addresses as one point, as well.
It was all two soon when Diana finished her drink, "Jack, I have to go, I've got my sister to meet up with." she said sadly.
"Hey wait, I don't even know your name!" Jack blurted out.
Diana paused as she was about to leave the room, "It's Diana" she said quietly, and walked off, that gentle melody still
tinkling her ears...
Little did she know that he heard it, too.
23rd Mar 2007, 05:00 PM
AWWWW! Yay! The cuteness! I missed this story, I love the sisters' relationship. She has to see Jack again! I also love the bit about anime. ;) Great to see this story back!
23rd Mar 2007, 11:13 PM
hehe, thanks! we'll see about Di seeing Jack again, you know, anything can happen
24th Mar 2007, 05:05 AM
Haha, I used to love Need for Speed! :D
...I had to take a break from workin on my story to catch up on everyone else's...this was really good!
24th Mar 2007, 11:06 AM
Awww.... she's gonna fall in love, isn't she? :p
25th Mar 2007, 06:19 PM
well... they're gonna get to know each other a bit more then... we'll see, I better get to work on chapter 8
30th Mar 2007, 09:41 AM
no update for about 2 weeks, but I'm working on some of the pictures now
30th Mar 2007, 05:02 PM
^_^ That was a cute update. I'm impressed with the detail.
15th Apr 2007, 03:30 PM
Thanks! :D well, now I'm back from my two week holiday, I can get started on the next chapter!!
19th Apr 2007, 05:43 PM
To All those people who can't be bovvered to post (kidding :P) Don't be mad at me, I've also got to update a website (lilac Sims 2, please check the link, pwetty please)
taking the pictures an' all, but I swear I will try to get it done before my birthday on the 15th of June, I WILL try, it's just I got SATs coming up too, argh!
19th Apr 2007, 05:48 PM
Your site is cool! Heh, don't worry, we understand you're busy - we can wait! Good luck with SATs (they're the most pointless exams ever, I wouldn't worry too much about them), and happy birthday for June! :P
19th Apr 2007, 05:57 PM
hehe that was very quick! I got a few pictures taken, it's the dream scene which is tedious, I'll say no more
EDIT: By the way, who likes MCR? (My Chemical Romance) Personally I think they are one of the best bands ever!
24th Apr 2007, 01:23 AM
Hey, Jennywren. I looked at your site & tried to download a dress, but it just linked me to a different site. Just thought I'd let you know.
Oh, and I like MCR... well until their recent album. Before that, I liked their music, but the last album was... well... crap. So, I really only listen to their first couple of albums.
24th Apr 2007, 05:22 PM
I do the same sort of thing with evanescence, kristal, when you click on the link it takes you to file cargo, 30 seconds later you download the file, that help?
29th Apr 2007, 10:12 PM
you know, I've just realised, in five months I have to get rid of the sims, so I've got five months to complete this. *pales*
and by the way, if this'll make you start posting, the next chapter will be verrrrrrrry Long! I've done 30 pictures so far!
6th May 2007, 07:32 PM
to all those silernt readers out there, speak up! please!!! pretty please?
7th May 2007, 02:28 PM
ughhh this is taking forever
7th May 2007, 05:03 PM
I love it! Jack is pretty cute! They should get together. Update soon please!
8th May 2007, 06:16 PM
right... so... I don't think I am any closer to finishing the chapters pictures, I haven't even finished taking them. ohh this is getting tedious, you don't know how long this is taking! I think I might have up to 60 pictures in chapter 8, 60!
I see there is a variation on the poll, will 1 & 3 winning, cool, some people want very sad, I didn't think they'd go for that, some like mysterious ( me too) I have ideas for both of those, but a disney ending? I'm not sure...
by the way, I have to give you another choice, I have two title pictures, and I want you to choose your favorite, 1 or 2? you decide...
8th May 2007, 06:22 PM
why do you ahve to get rid of the sims in 5 months??
8th May 2007, 06:38 PM
ahh.. sadly higher studies, GCSE'S, I regret that choice now, but I think I need to get rid of the to prevent any ahh distractions, heh like save it for the holidays, that seems cool, that way I can slowly work on perhaps an epilogue, depends on which choice wins the poll and I must say number 2 was my personal favorite, I dunno why it just looks cool and the phrases are better, I find the other scary, which is also cool
and by the way, does it take you this long to edit the pictures, do you find yourself with up to 60 pictures in one chapter? man, I need to shorten the amount of pictures I take if I'm to finish this
8th May 2007, 06:39 PM
OMG!! SO AWSOME!!!! I am so sorry I haven't posted I was busy myself this is an awsome story 5 stars I am subscribing!
The 2nd one looks beter ;)
8th May 2007, 06:40 PM
cool! thats all I can say, I have a fan, yay!
EDIT: I just finished the 50th picture, oh man...
8th May 2007, 06:57 PM
Oh my 50th piccie? :blink: GO YOU!!!!!!!!!! I wish I was like you lol I am kind of out of inspiration of my story I am to chapter 4 in my book of writing it and there is only chapter 2 here *sigh* but I LOVE THIS!
8th May 2007, 07:47 PM
yeah, 50, and counting, it's funny how a story can evolve really, I didn't think this would go this far! it's much better than my first, way better
10th May 2007, 10:31 PM
sorry guys, I'm just taking a break, gosh SATs are almost over woo!!
EDIT: my mother has basically insulted me, she thinks that my poems are getting boring, just because they're basically always about death or betrayed love or, you get my point, it's not my fault, thats just my style of writing! you've probably recognised that in this story too!
10th May 2007, 11:15 PM
It's cool. SATs, I know how that is. I'm surprised you let your mom read your poetry. I've never let mine (or anyone, actually) read mine.
12th May 2007, 03:18 PM
ahh whatever, but my sats are over, finito (oh yeah!) and you know what means, I've got time to get on with the sims!! I'm gonna get started as soon as I've finished uploading some eyes onto My website (lilac Sims 2)
15th May 2007, 01:31 AM
WHOOOO I want an update I am chewing my nails off!!!!!! I WANT IT NOW!!!!!!!!!!!! :D :P
15th May 2007, 07:38 PM
sorry my game froze so I couldn't save it, but hey, I got some of the pictures! it's getting there...
18th May 2007, 07:33 AM
it's wierd really, even my best friend lauren thinks I'm good, but mostly at poetry, I keep getting onto the sims too late so I don't have time to take pictures, darn, I'll try tonight
22nd May 2007, 07:05 PM
oh god this is taking too long, I'm skipping a bit of the chapter
2nd Jun 2007, 10:49 AM
ok, got all the pictures, now on with the writing!
2nd Jun 2007, 08:08 PM
Two months had past, May was moving into June. Summer was coming, but it felt like winter.
A family slept peacefully in the darkened, saddened house. A man and a woman slept huddled together in their bed, perhaps in an attempt to sew up the growing hole that might be one they’ll lose forever.
The youngest, Iris, however, was not as lucky as her parents, her dreams were fraught with nightmares and visions, her moaning, groaning cries filled the room, as, in her mind, she saw her dying brother.
Yet not in the hospital bed, an empty face, an empty shell, strapped to a beeping machine keeping him alive.
She saw him a few days before Halloween, when they were planning their costumes.
So much was different, if only they’d known, it could have been different.
Then her screams died away and she became still and calm. Who knew why.
Maybe it was the silent being watching her in the soft and noiseless moonlight. Maybe he was what calmed her. Was he someone she knew?
Iris looked around her, it was raining, hard. Lightning would sometimes light the sky, followed by thunder’s deep booming rumble.
Iris looked around, trying to find something that would give her some idea where she was, she saw a derelict building, and it looked like a church. Was that where she was? Standing in a deserted churchyard, silent as the wind, forlorn, forgotten?
There were a lot of chairs around, some crumpled programs as well, the chairs was spread around, all messed up, the programs were pressed into the ground. Maybe she was standing where there had been a wedding; it didn’t look like it turned out well. It seemed everyone was almost fighting to get away.
Then she saw her.
Iris let out a cry with shock.
She ran over to the girl lying on the ground underneath the arch blackened with despair. This was obviously the bride. She looked so… familiar. But how?
A statue stood tall over the girl, a weeping god, mourning her child.
Because this girl wasn’t sleeping, she wasn’t sick, none of that. This girl, this bride, was dead.
Above her body, as she lay in a red pool of her blood, the bells that should have cheered for her marriage, celebrated her love. Now wept over her, mourning the death that should never have happened.
The dead girl lay there her misty eyes empty yet still brimming with pain and sorrow.
Who knew what those now clouded eyes saw as darkness came and death shrouded them. Only god knew and he had so cruelly forsaken her. At least no man could hurt her now, she was beyond pain.
2nd Jun 2007, 08:10 PM
Iris walked away from the saddening sight; she then saw movement, not far ahead, by an old fountain. A boy wearing a bright white, too bright suit, and a girl in a light blue dress. She wore a glowing green gem around her neck.
There was something unnatural about the two; their eyes were white, no pupils, no other colour than white. They didn’t look much older than Iris herself, 15, maybe 16?
“What happened here?” She asked them.
Suddenly the girl imploded into a bright star of light, getting brighter. Iris gasped, what was going on?
Walk into the light
What was that?
The light, the light, walk into the light
Oh. It was the wind, and also the boy.
The boy was beckoning her forward.
Walk into the light
Calling, he was calling her
Walk into the light
But Iris was scared.
What would happen if she did?
Walk into the light
Would she die?
Walk into the light
Or would she go back home?
Walk into the Light!
The light grew so bright she could see nothing else, it drew her, it beckoned her, it wanted her to walk forth.
Iris drew back. Then, for reasons she could not understand, she ran forwards and jumped.
She stayed in the air.
How was this possible?
She began to float forwards.
Into the light
It grew brighter every second
Into the light
Then she entered the light and all sound was wiped out.
INTO THE LIGHT!
Except for a loud ringing
WAKE UP, WAKE UP, OPEN YOUR EYES!
And she opened them.
* * * *
Alice twitched slightly in her sleep, stirring, she heard Iris’s alarm clock going off. Then the sound was cut off.
Iris must be up, I’d best get up too
She prodded Sam in the back, “Ow,” he grunted sleepily.
“Come on you,” she said softly, “up, you’ve got to go to work today”
“But…” Sam started.
“No buts, you get up, now, make it quick and I’ll do omelettes” she said enticingly.
That got him up, Alice got out of bed too.
Sam laughed, “You always know the right thing to say to me” he said.
Alice laughed with him, “Duh” she said.
They kissed softly, sunlight strong between them.
“I’ll get started on those omelettes, you, in the shower” she said.
“Aye aye captain” Sam replied and walked off.
Alice got dressed then put up her hair out of her eyes. She then walked downstairs to start on the omelettes.
Alice had just given Iris her lunch and was serving up the omelettes when Sam came downstairs.
“Mmm, nice smell” he said, sniffing the air.
“bye mum!” Iris yelled as she ran through the door and got on the bus.
“I can’t stop thinking about him Sam, what if we lose him?” Alice cried.
“Shhh, don’t worry about it Alice, Anne is a great doctor, he’s been responding more and more lately” Sam said.
“Speaking of her, there’s something wrong with Anne, she’s changing, she’s becoming a lot… colder” Alice murmured.
2nd Jun 2007, 08:13 PM
“Listen my sweet,” Sam said, putting his hand over Alice’s, “whatever happens, we’ll go through it together, ok?”
“Together?” Alice asked.
“Together” Sam confirmed as he finished his omelette, “right, I’d best get to work” he said getting up, “I’ll see you at 3:00” and with a final kiss on the cheek, he left the room.
Alice walked down the steps in her swimming suit; it was a fine day for a swim.
She stepped onto the diving board and prepared to jump.
As she dove into the rippling water, she vanished briefly in the reflection of the sun.
That was all she did for the next few hours, just relaxing in the pool, getting up sometimes to dive again.
She never noticed Sam come back until he called out to her, “afternoon, my sweet mermaid”
“Hello!” Alice replied, “Back already?”
They shared a quick kiss in greeting, before Sam said, “oh and Iris wants to see you, she’s in her room.” He said.
“Thanks” Alice said and walked back upstairs to get dressed, then went to see Iris.
“Mum can you help me with my RS homework? We’re supposed to write a poem on dukkha, it means suffering, by the way” Iris asked.
“Ok, Iris, but you know I’m not going to write it” Alice said pointedly
“No, just help, ok?” Iris said.
And with that they got to work.
This is what Iris’s poem was:
A Suffering World
I lay back on blackening grass,
Amongst the trees whose leaves fall fast,
The crumbling stones, all around,
And yet I do not hear a sound.
At the beach a frail wind blows,
Among the withered leaves that show,
Among the sands, with printless foot,
A spirit walks, as dark as soot.
The rumbles from the earthquake past,
Resound through the night, the night that lasts,
The failing sun can still be seen,
But light has gone, and dark reigns queen.
So I sit back and watch the day,
As it slowly fades away,
Oh yes, ‘tis true, the day will die,
Yet I cannot, not I, not I.
The sour face of pain and sorrow,
Rears in the dying, with sister Woe,
And sickness mingles amongst the young,
Whilst death strikes even the most highly strung.
And I must stay and never die,
With a curse that would make the strongest cry,
What most would want, to live forever,
And even through pain, I must endeavour.
Keep the frailest hope alive,
The light awaked must never die,
Just for the sake of this cruel world,
From the depths, new life is hurled
“That,” Alice said, “is really good”
“Thanks,” Iris said, then she looked at her watch, “mum, I know it’s only 5:00, but I’m gonna have a nap, ok?” she asked.
“That’s fine, had a rough day?” Alice asked. Iris nodded, “ok, I’ll leave you be,” she said, then left the room.
Three hours later, at 8:00, when Sam had fallen asleep, Alice received a phone call from Anne.
“Come over? Now? Ok, I’ll be right there” she put the phone down then got out her mobile and called her sister.
“Look, I need you to come over to Anne’s, you remember the address? Good, I’m about to head there myself, see you there” and with that she hung up and went to wake Iris.
“Iris, Iris,” Alice shook her daughter, “wake up”
“what is it mum?” Iris asked groggily.
“get dressed, we’re going out” Alice said.
“where?” Iris asked
“I’ll tell you on the way, now get moving!” Alice said with a hint of urgency in her voice.
Alice was gazing out the window, deep in thought, when Iris came out her room, fully dressed and ready.
“You’re ready? Good, let’s go.” Alice said, her face completely empty.
They walked downstairs in silence, got into the car and drove off into the night.
Diana had arrived and waiting for them as they pulled up, “Alice, are you SURE that you don’t know anything about this?” she asked her sister.
“Positive” Alice replied.
“Oh well, we’d best go and knock” Diana said.
“Yeah," said Alice, “c’mon Iris”
2nd Jun 2007, 08:16 PM
Diana walked up to the door and knocked, waiting for a reply, there wasn’t one, but the door opened, as if on it it’s own.
Alice and Iris walked in, Diana stayed outside briefly, listening to the conversation.
“Where is he, is he ok?” Alice demanded.
“He’s in my bedroom” Anne replied.
“but is he ok?” Alice asked.
“Iris come with me” Anne said simply.
Diana then walked inside.
Iris followed Anne up to the door of her bedroom. Where they stopped.
“Anne, is he ok?” Iris said slowly.
Anne said nothing, just opened the door and beckoned Iris inside, “Iris, I’m so sorry, but…” she paused.
Iris looked in Anne’s room, Ben lay there, still, and silent.
“He’s dead” Anne finished.
Something didn’t seem right though.
2nd Jun 2007, 08:33 PM
at last, it is done, enjoy!
2nd Jun 2007, 10:16 PM
WOW. :blink: I'd forgotten how absolutely amazing this story was. I LOVE IT! The pictures... and the writing... and noooo, he can't be dead! Iris' dream - or whatever it was - was very mysterious, I'd love to hear more about that. Anyways. FANTASTIC update, really can't wait for more!
2nd Jun 2007, 11:19 PM
This is so good. D:
I'm definitely going to be following this one. Poor Ben... I can't wait to see what's really going on there...
3rd Jun 2007, 11:20 AM
loco: yeah, I like mysterious, but do you still trust anne's word after what Alice was saying? The ending to the chapter and the title of it both have a meaning, as did Iris's dream.
Cherry: oh I'll say you'll get your moneys worth :)
4th Jun 2007, 06:12 PM
man, I need more comments, I hope chap 8 has totally confused you!
4th Jun 2007, 06:34 PM
Whoa I had a lot of catching up to do! This is incredible, Jennywren! Awesome job! I love your pictures! Did you get a new graphics card? It seems like your pictures are more sharper now.
5th Jun 2007, 09:12 PM
no I'm serious, it's the same g-force one
6th Jun 2007, 06:32 AM
Omg!! I Loved This Chapter!!! Awsome Picture Taking I Love It!!!!!!!!!!
6th Jun 2007, 07:26 AM
right now I'm kinda buzy with preparing for the next chapter
10th Jun 2007, 09:03 PM
quite honestly, this story will end sooner than planned, as my computer needs rebuilding as it is so, damn, slow!
sorry guys :(
11th Jun 2007, 05:58 AM
Awww its ok I know how computers are mine is a handful too but take your time ok?
Hope it all goes well *hugs*.
15th Jun 2007, 06:33 PM
yeah, I'll try to make the chapters as good as possible yeah? <( '_'<)<( '_'<)<( '_'<)
16th Jun 2007, 12:00 PM
So whens the next update?OMG! You slapped me?
17th Jun 2007, 08:10 PM
errr no??? but I'm workin on preparin the next one now, which may take a while, new characters, new houses, all that lot, I think I'll set the first bit at Alices Family, to tie up any loose ends
20th Jun 2007, 08:06 PM
I've had a day or two off school, so that gives me more time to prepare everything for picture taking, although I have one done, and the chapter takes place 3-4 years later
23rd Jun 2007, 12:56 PM
Ok, good news everyone! I've started editing the pictures I have for the first scene of chap 9 if that cheers you up
24th Jun 2007, 03:27 AM
YAY!! I can't wait!
24th Jun 2007, 06:25 PM
Awesome story! Oh, I've missed coming here to see these stories but there's some amazing ones here now that I"m back!
29th Jun 2007, 09:05 PM
I've just been photoshopping some of the pictures I've got, and one turned out sooo cool! I can't wait till I post the chapter so you can see it
3rd Jul 2007, 10:17 PM
arn't any of you excited that I only got one more scene to do before the pictures are done and I can start writing???
3rd Jul 2007, 10:32 PM
Dude I can't believe I've forgotten about this story! I'm sorry! I can't wait!! :jig:
4th Jul 2007, 09:26 PM
yes I am the forgotten one :P Nah don't worry, tell you what, I get started on the last scene... nnnnnnnow!
11th Jul 2007, 10:46 PM
got started on writing the next chapter, not long now, up by the weekend with luck
11th Jul 2007, 11:11 PM
Yay I can't wait! :banana:
12th Jul 2007, 09:54 PM
just read your chapter
, very good, I think Logans going off her now...
13th Jul 2007, 02:29 AM
Thanks!! Lol you think so? :P
15th Jul 2007, 09:41 PM
yeah, by the way, I can't garantee i'll finish it tonight, I'm rather busy with super important rehearsals and a music exam, so you can imagine I'm juggling a bit here
15th Jul 2007, 09:44 PM
It's ok! :) I'll still be here waiting patiently!
16th Jul 2007, 03:19 AM
Hey thats okay, just take your time :)
21st Jul 2007, 07:27 PM
it's nearly done!
21st Jul 2007, 09:34 PM
3 years. That was all it took, or all it would take, to crush a fragile heart down to nothing, to take away so much, that the true meaning of the phrase ‘you don’t have to die to lose your life’ was realised, losing so much, that you never cared for life any more, you just wanted it to end. That was how Iris felt, 3 years back, when she was told her brother was dead.
But he wasn’t.
In that split second, Iris had gone cold inside, tears prickled her eyes but did not fall, she wanted to cry but she couldn’t, the grief had frozen her insides.
Then he stirred.
His eyes had fluttered, then opened.
Iris’s grief turned to joy, then to confusion, and to anger. Why had she lied?
Why? Why? Why?
“Iris, are you going to get down here or not?” Millie shouted.
“Yeah, come on, sis. We’re waiting” Ben added.
“On my way” Iris yelled down. Funny how much a person can change in so little time, an old life will flicker and die, but a new one springs up the next second.
Deaths whisper, soon to be life’s cry.
As Iris walked down the stairs, she could hear conversation, in little snatches.
“You think it could work?”
“Sure sweetie, any group like us could do it”
“Millie, just so you know, never call Ben sweetie”
“Oh! Heh, sorry Ben”
As Iris walked in, Millie changed the song to ‘famous last words’. They had been listening to My Chemical Romance all afternoon, one of their favourite bands.
“Nice Top” Caleb said.
“Yeah it looks really great” Ben agreed.
Millie came back to speak, “Hey, what took you so long? Got stuck?” she teased.
Iris grinned, she hadn’t got stuck, she was on her computer.
“Nah, I was checking for concerts” she said...
“Oh, I see, they coming to London yet?” Millie inquired.
Iris shook her head, “Wembley, 2 months” she replied.
“Shall we go?”
“Yeah, silly question to ask really”
Everyone laughed in agreement.
Iris sat down, “At least we got MCR to look forward to” she observed.
Ben nodded, “true, anyway, we got something to tell you, it is just so cool!”
“Oooh, tell me more” Iris said, interested. The day was going well, first she had got an A+ on Music, then had gone shopping with Millie, then they were going to a My Chemical Romance concert, but on that there was one thing she hadn’t told them.
“Well, we’ve decided that we are going to start a band” Caleb said
“What? Omigosh you’re kidding!” Iris gasped.
“Nope, I’m being straight and true, right to the bone” Ben said.
“Just like a bullet” Millie observed.
“And that’s saying something” Caleb added.
“Hey!” Ben laughed.
Iris shook her head in mock despair, “you guys are just too cruel to my brother sometimes” she sighed.
“But where will we practise, we don’t even have a name yet” Caleb said anxiously.
“Don’t worry Caleb, it will be fine, with you as bassist, me as guitarist, Ben as Drummer, and of course, Millie as singer, I have an Idea for a name as well.
Iris reassured him.
“You have an idea for a name?” Ben asked. “Let’s hear it then”
“Well, I mean, I was thinking, how about… Dreamscape?” Iris suggested.
Everyone’s eyebrows raised, but Iris couldn’t tell, whether or not they liked it or not.
“I like it” Caleb said, with a look in his eyes that Iris couldn’t read.
“Oh you like everything she says” Millie scoffed, “but I like it too, but we have got to use Lucidity for the name of our first album” she said.
Lucidity… known in the older days as a form of madness, that worked quite well.
“Good idea, Millie, that is brilliant” Iris praised. She looked at Caleb, there was definitely something there, but she couldn’t work out what it was. Iris began to wonder if something was wrong.
“Both of those are brilliant names, closely related in meaning as well” Ben commented.
Well Ben would know. Iris had no idea what he had dreamt while in a coma, because he had said never to ask him that again.
21st Jul 2007, 09:36 PM
Iris was sure of it now, there was something very wrong. “Caleb, what’s wrong?” she asked him quietly, she was worried. Caleb was usually cheerful and optimistic, but he wasn’t right now, something was definitely wrong.
“It’s nothing” Caleb muttered half-heartedly.
“If there is anyone you don’t want to lie to, it’s me” Iris said calmly, yet there was a tense note underneath, “you obviously don’t want us to know, because you’re worried what we will say, but you can tell us anything, what, is wrong?” she asked again.
“Honestly Iris, it’s nothing” Caleb said, unwilling to let the truth out. Iris raised her eyebrows sceptically.
Caleb sighed with irritation and walked over to the window and turned the music off. Then he gave in to Iris’s request.
“Do you remember me telling you guys how my mother and father were w*****?” he asked.
“Yeah, why?” Iris said, quietly.
“Well…” Caleb turned round; Iris had never seen him like this. A mixture of emotions was laid out on his face, fear, disgust, anger, worry, apprehension;
She had never seen him look so angry, or scared.
“They want me to follow in their footsteps” he finished. Everyone gasped.
“They are taking me to the local brothel next Saturday, so I can have my first experience” Caleb said so quietly, he was almost whispering.
“What?! They can’t do that!” Ben snapped, outraged.
“They can, because of who owns the place” he replied.
“Why, who owns that brothel?” Ben asked, but Iris thought she knew the answer.
“Jock McNeal” Caleb replied, trying to sound off-hand. Iris looked at her feet, things were getting worse by the second, she had heard about Jock McNeal, pervert, Rapist, all that and suspected for murder, but never went to Jail, because he always had a scapegoat handy to get him out of trouble.
“Oh no,” Millie muttered.
“Oh yes” Caleb sighed submissively.
“He was that man, who tried to drag me into a bush, I was too young then to know why” Iris murmured.
Caleb looked at her, directly in the eyes, there was a sudden sadness in his eyes, like he was trying to apologise for something without words.
“That’s not all,” Caleb honestly looked close to tears, he was shaking, but with fear or anger, Iris wasn’t sure, “they said, Mr McNeal, had also requested I take someone with me” he paused unsure how to continue.
Iris continued for him “Who?” she almost whispered.
“Oh they said he was quite specific, Iris, I’m so sorry, he asked for…” he breathed in, a single tear made it’s way down his cheek, “he asked for, you” he finished.
Ben began to hyperventilate, he was remembering, it was obvious, as was she, that night, 3 – 4 years ago, Ben had gotten himself shot to protect her, fighting for her safety, she had a feeling he’d do it again, he was so protective.
“Ben, Shhh, don’t worry, calm down, we’ll sort this out, I swear, Iris” Millie said to both Ben and Iris.
Iris slowly shook her head, “Look last time that happened, Ben almost got himself killed, I can’t let that happen again, Caleb won’t have to follow in his parents footsteps, but I know that you don’t p*** off Jock McNeal without a price, he’ll destroy your life, then end it, I’ll go through with it, if I have to” she said, and after that threw her arms around Caleb’s neck, (winding him in the meantime) looking to give, and find reassurance.
Millie had just got off the phone to her parents, “sorry guys, I gotta scoot off home now, my parents want me back for dinner, after that I can have a major snog-fest with Ty” Millie said, “but listen, Iris, don’t give up yet, I don’t give up on my friends like that” she said determinately, and hugged her goodbye.
“Yeah, I’d better go too, got homework to do, or my mum will go spare, but it’s not like she’d care” Ben sighed.
Iris sat down, trying to clear her head. Caleb pulled her up to his level, “Iris, I’m so sorry, if there was another way…” he trailed off, Iris looked at him sadly.
“There isn’t, but I’ll make sure you won’t follow in your parents footsteps, if you don’t want to” she whispered.
“But what if I do want to?” Caleb whispered.
“Then that’s your choice, but I promise I’ll stay your friend no matter what” Iris answered.
Caleb smiled, “thanks” he murmured. They separated and he left the room.
After Caleb left, Iris turned to speak to her brother.
But he wasn’t there.
He was gone.
* * * *
Jack was playing his piano. Music was filtering out the window where sunlight was streaming in.
Suddenly a knock sounded at the door. Jack stopped playing abruptly and looked out the window. It was obvious who was out there.
A young, beautiful, yet nervous woman was standing outside, waiting to be let in.
Diana stood nervously, waiting to be let in, wanting to know why Jack had called her, curiosity was burning through her veins as she waited.
Jack almost sprinted to the door, frantically trying to flatten his hair, hoping he looked alright.
He stopped, panting slightly, and opened the door to let Diana in.
As he let Diana in, Jack wasted no time in kissing Diana in greeting. As they pulled apart Diana whispered “hello”
“Same to you” Jack murmured.
“So why did you bring me over here?” Diana asked.
“Does there need to be a reason” Jack replied, holding the reason back.
“No” Diana laughed.
As they walked in Jack started to say “Diana, I…” but never got past the first few words.
“Jack, what’s wrong?” Diana asked, concerned.
“I… I think you should hide in the closet, now” he replied.
“What?” Diana looked at Jack closely, something was definitely wrong, Jack was looking really scared.
“Please, just do it” Jack pleaded.
Diana did as she was told and hid among the dust, spiders and cobwebs in the closet; she pressed her eye against a small keyhole in the door and tried to find out what was going on.
21st Jul 2007, 09:38 PM
Although Diana couldn’t see this, three men were striding towards the door, and they looked like they meant business.
Diana heard the door open with a bang and footsteps getting louder and louder as they got closer and closer.
Two of the men guarded the corridor to the front door, and the meanest looking of the three stepped forward.
All he said was three words, three simple words, three words that struck terror into Diana’s heart.
“Where, is she?” the man growled.
“Where is who?” Jack replied steadily.
“Don’t play dumb with me! We know you’re together” the man snapped.
With a jolt, Diana realised who they were talking about. Her.
She kept her eyes fixed on Jack, one twitch, one look could give her away, but Jack did nothing.
“Diana’s not here, she left an hour ago” Jack said quietly.
“Where!” the man yelled.
“I don’t know, she didn’t say” Jack replied calmly.
“We will find her, no-one gets away from Jock McNeal” Jock growled.
“Better start looking, because she’s not here” Jack contradicted.
If looks could kill, Jack would have been dead there and then. The look on Jocks face was beyond anger.
“And we will,” Jock hissed, “Dan, Matt! Deal with this cheeky g**” he snapped.
As Jock moved out of sight, laughing softly, the other two closed in on Jack. One punched him in the stomach, and as he doubled up in pain, the other gave Jack a brutal kick to the head. Jack staggered out of sight the others moved away. Only when she heard the door click shut did Diana open the door.
Her mind was reeling, now she knew who had killed Chris and shot Ben.
As Diana looked down, what she saw brought tears to her eyes.
Because Jack was lying crumpled on the floor.
And he wasn’t moving.
* * * *
Iris walked out to where the hot tub was; she saw that Ben was lying on the grass, lost in thought.
Ben lifted his head and murmured “hey” as Iris sat down.
“Hey Ben, you ok?” Iris asked.
“Yeah” Ben sighed.
“How’s your shoulder?” Iris continued.
“Sore, it still hurts even after three years” Ben groaned as he stood up.
“I was just thinking, about Caleb, and you” Ben said, “something tells me he wants to finish what he started with you” he added.
“Yeah, I kind of guessed that too” Iris said.
“Iris, you know I can’t…” Ben started to say, but Iris interrupted.
“listen there is nothing you can do, he sent you into a coma last time, if you try anything this time, he might kill you!” she said.
“But nothing,” Iris said, “Listen, I’m a strong person; I’ll get through with it, and if McNeal gets to finish what he started, then let him, after it over, then we’ll talk about dealing with it” she said sternly.
Ben opened his mouth to say something, thought better of it and ended up saying “Ok” in submission.
As Iris got up, Ben hugged her tight, “just be careful, I couldn’t forgive myself if something happened to you” he whispered into her hair.
“I know” Iris murmured.
One passing by would be touched to see such an amount of tenderness between two siblings, and although she didn’t say anything, Iris was scared, so very scared.
* * * *
Jack lay on his sofa, with Diana anxiously watching, he look awfully pale, and a nasty bruise was coming up where one of the men had kicked him.
Diana was close to panic, he was still breathing, but Diana didn’t know how far the damage extended, she hoped he was just unconscious.
Very suddenly, Jack began to stir; he opened his eyes and sat up, blinking rapidly.
Jack looked at Diana, “I know you, don’t I?” he asked.
21st Jul 2007, 09:39 PM
“Yes, we’ve been together for three years now” Diana replied, smiling.
Jack’s eyes widened for a second, as if he were remembering something he’d meant to do, “Hey, where are you going?” He asked as Diana walked away.
“Just getting a drink, I’m dead thirsty” Diana replied.
“Hold on, wait!” Jack shouted suddenly, running up to Diana.
Willow looked at her father curiously, “Are you….” She started to say, but was silenced at a single look from Jack.
“I have to ask you something” Jack said, and putting his hand in his back pocket he fell on one knee, he took out a small black box and said, “will you marry me?”
And he opened the box.
Dian’s mouth gaped open, “you’re kidding” she breathed as she saw the beautiful ring before her.
“Will you?” asked Jack.
“Yes” she half gasped, half whispered.
The joy in Jacks eyes seemed enough to stop time at that very moment. Both his eyes were shining with the light of the ring he bought her.
“Really?” Jack murmured.
“Yes” Diana whispered as she put the ring on. Tears started flowing from her eyes.
“Sweetheart, are you ok?” Jack asked, worried.
Diana wiped her eyes, “yes, I’m fine,” she said shakily, “I was just… remembering."
“Chris?” Jack asked.
Diana nodded, “how could I forget” she murmured.
“You must have really loved him” Jack commented.
“Yes,” Diana replied, “he made even the greyest days shine, I sometimes think I see him in you, you know” she told him.
“You do?” Jack asked.
Diana fell into Jacks arms and held him tight, “I never thought I would be able to move on, until I met you” she whispered.
Jack held her tight as well, and then their faces got closer.
“Oh get a room you guys” Willow complained.
They ignored Willow and drew their lips together. Kissing would seem such a simple action, but it could save 1000 lives, or change just one.
And so Jack and Diana got married and lived happily ever after, but life doesn’t work like that.
If only it did.
Because in another town, another house, a soul was slowly falling to the darkness, and a phone was ringing.
22nd Jul 2007, 11:03 AM
I know part of this seems a bit pg, but I won't show anything that happens on that saturday, except in one very dark flashback, but I hope you like it.
22nd Jul 2007, 10:31 PM
ok, if you think it't rude I'll put a warning in, but I think it's only pictures you should put a warning for, not words, because I've put swearing in previous chapters and no ones said anything about and I've always censored them
23rd Jul 2007, 09:12 PM
what, don't you like it? :( :'(
23rd Jul 2007, 09:26 PM
I like it! I don't know why people aren't commenting on this, it's great! I love your pictures! Are you using photoshop or something? Very nice update! :)
24th Jul 2007, 05:38 PM
yeah, just to add to the quality of tone and stuff, and the tears a nd bruises too
and the phone in the last picture is significant
nooooooo the end is near!
What will happen?
*jekyll voice* 3 guesses, one or the other
Iris caleb Diana Jack
who will it be? you don't even know and it drives you nuts
oooh and what about chris? :mute: mm mmmm mmmmmm mmmmmmm
*thoughts* help my lips are sealed! until the next chapter!
24th Jul 2007, 05:40 PM
It looks really good! :)
25th Jul 2007, 12:59 AM
Hey! Sorry when I have had a chance to read I've been in 'stealth mode'.
I'm lucky to get my story updated. LOL!
When I logged in today I took up from where everyone thought Ben had died and caught up until now. I'm still here and can't wait to see what happens next.
P.S. Your pictures are amazing.
(Tries to pry tape from icons mouth (from your last post)...I guess I'll just have to tune in!)
25th Jul 2007, 01:41 PM
mmmm mmm mmm mmmmm mmmmmm *thoughts* that was the point montridge, I get started asap
28th Jul 2007, 08:31 PM
*manages to rip tape off* yes! now I can speak, right, I have got started on the taking of the pictures for the last chapter, and then the epilogue
hows that for good news?
1st Aug 2007, 10:22 AM
what? are you losing interest? anyway I'm going to start editing the third scene of chapter 10, then I just have to build the lot for the last scene
1st Aug 2007, 06:03 PM
Me not losing interest at all. Just waiting on the next chapter. :)
2nd Aug 2007, 11:26 AM
yes, working on it
8th Aug 2007, 01:58 PM
I've almost finished the last scene!
8th Aug 2007, 10:11 PM
Iris didn’t want to remember, but the images just kept coming back at her, forcing her to relive that night, all the pain, all the terror.
She had done her best to go through with it, but it wasn’t easy. Some people would think she’d feel betrayed by Caleb, doing such a thing to her, but Iris knew the truth, he had been forced into it, forced to perform the act that left little drops of crimson staining the bed.
So much pain, and all that showed was a single tear, making its way down her face.
* * * *
“Right, lets see, here try this one” Alice said, holding out a dress.
“You know, you really don’t have to do this, I can pick a dress by myself” Diana said pointedly.
Alice raised an eyebrow, “no twin of mine is going to buy a wedding dress without my advice” she replied calmly.
Diana laughed at her sisters outrageous personality, “control freak” she said.
Alice rolled her eyes, “whatever, now try this on, go on” she said, handing Diana the dress and pointed at the fitting rooms.
As Diana walked out of the fitting room, she said, “I don’t think so, don’t like the flowers” as she looked down at it in distaste.
“Are you sure?” Alice asked. Diana nodded, “well take this one then” Alice replied, handing her another dress.
“This looks better,” Diana commented, “yes, I think I’ll get this one” she decided, going back into the changing room.
After Diana had paid for the dress, she noticed that Alice was going into the fitting rooms, “what are you doing?” she asked.
“You’ll see” she replied.
Alice walked out of the dressing room in an absolutely gorgeous dress. “Whoa” Diana breathed.
“Like it?” Alice asked, “I saw it on the rail and just had to try it on.”
After Diana had got a new necklace and a matching pair of earrings, she got her hair prepared for the way she was going to wear it the next day, for her wedding.
“All that done,” she commented to Alice, “now that just leaves the wedding to go through with.”
* * * *
Later that day, Iris was taking a night-time stroll through her local park, as she reached the bridge; she noticed that Caleb was standing there before her, staring at his reflection in the moonlit lake.
Caleb turned when he heard Iris behind him, “hey,” he said, surprised, “I was just about, to, erm, go” he muttered, and he quickly turned to leave, but Iris grabbed his arm.
“Caleb, what’s wrong?” she asked him quietly.
“I don’t wanna talk about it,” he said.
“Is it about Saturday? It’s just you’ve been avoiding me all week, so come on, tell me what’s wrong” Iris replied.
“Look, if you knew how I felt about you…” Caleb started to say.
“I do” Iris interrupted.
“You’d… what?” he asked, surprised at what she had said.
“I’ve known for ages” Iris said quietly.
“I thought… you’d hate me, for what I did” he whispered.
“I don’t, it wasn’t your fault” Iris reassured him.
“Really?” he asked.
Iris nodded, “I actually think we should’ve been brought closer by that day, it certainly changed the way I feel about you” Iris pointed out.
Suddenly Caleb put his arms around Iris’s neck. Iris got the hint and did the same. It seemed that Iris’s words had given him the courage to take the step he’d been to afraid to take.
8th Aug 2007, 10:12 PM
Then at long last, Caleb and Iris kissed for the first time, finally discovering the wordless meaning of love, realising that love is more pure energy which joins a couple together.
After what felt like years they parted, “thank-you” Caleb whispered.
“For what?” Iris asked.
“For everything” Caleb replied.
Iris smiled, “you remember how I said we were going to an MCR concert in about two months? There’s something I haven’t told you yet” she said.
* * * *
“Hey Millie” Iris said.
“Hey,” Millie replied, she raised an eyebrow at Iris’s hair colour, “bright pink? At a wedding?” she asked.
“What, you think I should’ve done blue?” Iris asked, surprised.
“Nah, I’m just messing with you, it looks great, honestly” Millie reassured her.
“So, how are you, did you sort things out with Caleb?” Millie asked.
“Yep, and also, I’ve got something to tell you, but not here, come on,” Iris walked over to the seats, Millie following her.
“No way, four VIP tickets? How’d you get those?” Millie hissed, astounded.
“I won a competition” Iris replied simply.
“No kidding! We’re gonna meet the actual band? Omigod, that is so cool!” Millie gasped.
“Yeah, but don’t tell Ben, it’s for his birthday and I want to keep it a surprise,” Iris said.
Millie nodded slowly and seriously, closing an imaginary zip across her lips.
Suddenly Iris looked over Millie’s shoulder and saw two people, one boy, one girl, barely older that Iris, who had become 15 quite recently.
Who were they? They looked familiar; Iris thought she remembered them, as if from a dream…
But what were they doing here?
“What?” Millie asked.
“Nothing, I thought I saw… but it was nothing,” Iris said, “Anyway, I think we should sit down, Diana’s here.” She finished abruptly.
Diana stood, at the start of the aisle. Finally, the moment was upon her, she was dead nervous, but she knew what to do, and walked towards Jack, unaware of the menace behind her.
Jack and Diana exchanged their vows, both so happy the moment had arrived, another felt the same, but for a different, much more sinister reason.
Jock McNeal grinned maliciously and took aim. He used to be in the army so he had a great eye when it came to this.
The bullet shot out of the gun and everybody ducked, screaming at the same time, but one wasn’t quick enough.
Diana fell to her knees, clutching her side, she brought her hands to her face.
They were covered in blood.
Jack saw it all, “no,” he whispered, “no, this can’t be happening, Diana!” he cried, tears streaming down his face.
Diana was struggling to stay conscious, “Jack,” she breathed shakily, “I see,… something”
Finally her remaining strength gave out and she collapsed on the floor, face down.
“No, no. Diana stay with me, come on, please” he gasped, short of breath, “somebody help her!” he shouted, but no one could move, they were in shock, too horrified to move a muscle.
Amidst Jack’s grief-stricken wailing, Iris turned and saw a dark figure casually striding away.
“Oh no you don’t” Iris hissed and ran after him, anger burning through her like fire. She was going to make him pay, oh yes.
8th Aug 2007, 10:55 PM
Wow that's so sad. I hope she didn't die! I wonder who that man was who shot her! Great update!! :D
9th Aug 2007, 01:46 AM
*tries to calm down*
I have not lost interest. I just don't get as much quaility computer time these days. (If I'm at work I sneak on and lurk.)
I also have to say those pictures were freakin' awesome.
9th Aug 2007, 10:23 AM
stormy: if you look back you'll find he crops up throughout the story, the beginning (the man who was high on drugs) there was chapter 3 I think, no wait it was 4, (the man who tried to drag little iris into a bush) and of course, the owner of the brothel and the man who threatened Jack.
montridge: hmm I'll get started on the epi asap,, but I must say, I loved the ending of that chapter I posted yesterday
she was going to make him pay, oh yes.
that is just a really good ending
but thanks for the feedback
9th Aug 2007, 01:31 PM
Thats really good
When are you going to write more?
9th Aug 2007, 02:04 PM
guitaristruleok: soon, thats all I can say
9th Aug 2007, 03:23 PM
it's funny, I've got all the pictures done and am about to start writing, but I wonder if I should let it wait till tuesday, what do yu think?
(I think I know the answer heh heh heh...)
9th Aug 2007, 04:50 PM
A mountain range, beneath a red sky, a sky so clear you could see the stars and the galaxies, rotating in their own personal haven. Everything on a particular plateau was calm to the sight, but if you looked harder, with a clearer mind, you would see the rage and chaos burning everywhere. This was a place where only those with the calmest and clearest mind, those who knew who they were, where they were, only they could see it truly. They would see how the colours they saw were a little more intense that it would be thought natural. It was said they could see through space and time itself, into other worlds, worlds where everything was what dreams are made of.
People would look, and say they could see it, but they couldn’t. To look is not to see, they could not see how the world was so poisoned by those creatures who thought they had conquered it. How ignorant they were.
Under the red sky, the clear red sky, so clear you could see everything if you looked, a girl stood. Unsure where she was, and how she got there. Just standing there, in a white dress, looking up at the clear red sky bemusedly. She could see everything, and she was just working it out.
Diana walked over to the edge of the plateau and looked down. Straight down.
All she saw was a ravine that sank into darkness, but something told her there was more to it than met the eye. Sounds came out of it, such strange sounds. Voices, muffled so she couldn’t hear the words clearly. Two words she was able to pick out came from a girls voice, it sounded familiar.
Those were the words, but wake up from what?
Another sound she heard was a rhythmic beeping, never stopping, and endless high pitched drumbeat. It was rather unnerving, but Diana noticed that the closer she got to the ravine the louder and clearer these sounds got, and the stronger the impulse to throw herself into the void became.
Diana was scared. What would happen if she jumped over the edge? What would happen if she fell into the blackness? She would almost certainly die, but would she?
There was definitely something down there, and Diana desperately wanted to find out what it was, but she was too scared to jump.
Diana jumped at a sound behind her and turned around. A bright shape, light and dark at the same time was forming, into what looked like a man.
This, man held out a hand to her and Diana realised where she was. This man of the light was a gateway, so was the ravine. Gateways to other worlds, and she had to make a choice. The world she was in, the world between worlds, it was becoming more chaotic. She couldn’t stay here forever; she had to choose a gate.
But which one?
With barely time to think Diana made her choice. She turned and threw herself bodily into the ravine and began to fall, the sounds getting louder and clearer as she fell down and down and down.
Diana began to think she had made a mistake, did she make the wrong choice?
But it was too late to turn back now.
All she could do was to fall and wait for it to end.
All she did was open her eyes.
9th Aug 2007, 06:34 PM
I'm hoping that she fell back into life and will wake up in the hospital!
The chapter and cliffhanger were excellant.
*chants* please wake up Diana. :weep:
9th Aug 2007, 07:59 PM
thats it, but you never know, that's the epilogue, I've decided not to tell you whether she wakes up or not, but let you hang on it, but I might change the last bit to:
all she did was open her eyes
or should I leave it as it is?
EDIT: was that ahhhhhhhhhh! as a sigh or a scream?
I may take one last picture to cheer you all up, maybe...
11th Aug 2007, 06:51 AM
was this the end? :(
Im assuming she woke up.... but I want to know what happens with her husband, and if they ever catch that man... and what about Iris chasing him? Did she catch him and and do something? did he do something to her? What about Caleb? Does he take a stand against his parents?
...Im a girl of many questions :p
This was really great Jenny and the pictures were really nice too :D
14th Aug 2007, 06:02 PM
I told you I'd leave it at a mysterious ending :D
but can you guess the underlying emotion(s) in the final chapter?
14th Aug 2007, 10:54 PM
I've been looking at stormy's new story and for fun I checked the ratings, she got 4.40 in 5 votes, I got less than that in 17 votes! well done stormy! *claps and whoops wildly* ok that was a bit random, but I like her story's especially her newest one.
On another subject, when are the mods going to move this to the completed story's section?
by the way I don't actually care whether you love my story, or hate it, so you can say if it's rubbish and I won't mind, it's good to know these things, but it was fun writing this story and I wish it never had to end, but all things must come to an end, nothing lasts forever, and I'm fine with that, I wouldn't want it any other way.
I wouldn't want to live forever, would you?
being immortal is not the same as being immortalised.
14th Aug 2007, 11:04 PM
Aww thanks Jennywren! *blushes* Your story is great too!! :D
14th Aug 2007, 11:05 PM
awww thanks, I must always comment on good storys, it's a craving, whether on my thread or yours
14th Aug 2007, 11:08 PM
Yep! Here, here! :beer:
16th Aug 2007, 12:30 AM
My AAAAAHHH was a scream. Even though I actually voted for a mysterious ending, I'm a brat and wanted more. As for putting this into the complete list, I think you have to PM a mod and let them know.
16th Aug 2007, 02:35 AM
i love this story! i'm almost sorry to see it end!! the pictures were fantastic [especially the end] & the story was well-written! good job!
16th Aug 2007, 11:04 AM
yay! I have another fan! actutally my cousin gave me the idea for the epilogue, she also tried to persuade me to add more spice into it, like an affair, didn't want to, I was just focusing on what happened.
I know! I'll do one smaller chapter to show you what happens between Iris and Jock
1st Sep 2007, 05:04 PM
Woah. Woah! That was AMAZING! I'm taken by surprise at every update you post, they're all so amazing. But yay, an extra chapter? I can't wait! That was amazing, but I think the cliffhanger would have driven me crazy! :D
2nd Sep 2007, 02:08 PM
sorry I can't any more, dad rebuilt the computer and I don't have the sims any more, I'm leaving it there for you to imagine what will will happen
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